Talk:Lepa Mladjenovic

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I found this article through Typo Team/moss. I corrected the three misspelled words found by Typo Team moss, but I saw that there was work that could be done. Here are some of the things I noted:
 * too-long lists, example: "lesbian, feminist, radical anti-fascist" or "Novi Sad, Maribor, Skopje, Belgrade, Zagreb, Pristina, Split and Ljubljana"
 * repetition, for example: "Lesbian Week gathered lesbian activists and lesbian women around common topics important for lesbian existence"
 * possible contradictions - was the SOS hotline started in 1990, 1993, 2012??
 * unnecessary details- is it important to know how she spent her summers as a child? Are her efforts as a student against her university important?  Is it important to know that she brought 22 activists to a ceremony at which she received an award?  (I already deleted a reference to her hitchiking to meetings.)
 * vague concepts/tendentious statements/fluff words-- "rigid educational system", "rules which do not empower students", "based on a self-awareness model", "workshops of experience for emotional literacy of activists and particularly lesbians"

Perhaps I'm not being fair or am not familiar enough with the relevant topics. But I still think that the style could be improved and the article could probably be made more focused. Jkgree (talk) 22:08, 16 April 2019 (UTC)