Talk:Les Holden/GA1

GA Review
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Les Holden

The article was missing persondata but I added it. I also added the birth template to the infobox. I ran the article through AWB but nothing came up there. I reviewed the images and they all appear to have the correct tags and are in the public domain. Other than these few mostly petty things the article is very well written. Good Job. --Kumioko (talk) 20:16, 8 April 2010 (UTC) Reviewer: Kumioko (talk) 20:16, 8 April 2010 (UTC)
 * There are a couple of references that appear to be missing the accessdate per Here
 * Yep, in this case they're published books that just happen to be available in full on the web, so they have page numbers and a 'life' independent of the web. The access date thing is really for web-centric sources. I tested this argument in a FAC a year or two ago and it's been accepted since.
 * In the second paragraph of the lede you state "his skill earned him" and this seems somewhat POV to me. I think it should just be something like "he earned"
 * Fair enough.
 * In the start of the Early life section you state Les Holden and I recommend changing it to just Holden.
 * I did that to clearly distinguish from the father, mentioned in the same sentence, but I guess it's not a big deal.
 * In the first paragraph of the World War I section you state "his mechanical bent". I gather from the context that this means ability but I think it shoudl be clarified because some readers won't know.
 * Yep, fine with me.
 * In the world war I section I think you should link Major for "Major Oswald Watt".
 * I used to always link ranks but I think it's overkill when the person is linked as well - there are arguments on both sides but this method seems acceptable at GAN/ACR/FAC.
 * In the World War I section you have a quote that says "a flying wreck. Every part of it was shot full of holes, including petrol-tank, tail-plane, both longerons, and part of the undercarriage, while the elevator control was shot clean away." without an inline cite.
 * The two citations that follow the next quote cover that whole bit about Cambrai, but I should be able to tweak so the first quote is directly cited.
 * The article doesn't seem to mention where he is buried and I think that this would be good to have if known.
 * Agree, I'll see if a newspaper article mentions it - the ones I've seen dealt with the crash though, not his funeral.
 * Tks for taking the time to review, Kumioko, will get on to these later today. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 21:53, 8 April 2010 (UTC)
 * All my concerns have been met. This article is passed as GA, well done. --Kumioko (talk) 13:43, 9 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Many thanks, Kumioko -- Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:05, 9 April 2010 (UTC)