Talk:Leslie H. Martin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 07:24, 18 June 2017 (UTC)

The article is in good shape. I have a few queries/comments:
 * He is referred to as a "Higher Education Advisor" in the lead, but there is no reference to that title in the body. Is this meant to describe a generic role or is it a title of a position? If the former, it should probably be in lower case, if the latter, some mention of it in the body is necessary.
 * ✅ Deleted. (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Higher Education" in the lead should be lower case and linked
 * ✅ DE-capped. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * link Australian Atomic Energy Commission in the lead
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * suggest linking PhD to Doctor of Philosophy
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * drop the initial cap from Xenon, and mention that it is a chemical element, as it would not be commonly known to science numpties like me
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * drop the initial cap from Quantum
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * drop the initial cap from Military
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * RAAF in full at first mention
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * HE should be He
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "as best as his limited"
 * ✅ Really? Done anyway. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * was he involved in the 3 MeV betatron? It isn't clear.
 * Nor is the source, which says "In 1945 Lasich and Riddiford started building a 3 MeV betatron. This was converted to an 18 MeV electron synchrotron in 1948 when Muirhead and Wright joined the group. In 1962, shortly after Martin had left, a new 35 MeV Siemens betatron was obtained and was used by Spicer, Muirhead and Thompson for photonuclear work until 1986." But it's certainly an important piece of equipment acquired on his watch. (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * CSIRO in full at first mention
 * ✅ Another organisation better known by its initials. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * link fellow
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * should it be "included as the Defence Scientific Adviser"?
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * drop the initial cap of Chairman
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * state where the Totem tests were done
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * link Australian Atomic Energy Commission at first mention in the body
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "from August 1959"
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * drop initial caps on Editorial Council
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * you could just use Duntroon and ADFA in the section about the prize (if you introduced the ADFA acronym when it is first mentioned
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)

That's me done. The image is not free but has a good FUR. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:05, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, and is illustrated by an image with an acceptable FUR. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 18 June 2017 (UTC)