Talk:Lesser Himalayan Strata

Review from Jennifer
Hi Tanyaaa :^D! Here are some suggestions for your page:
 * 1) In the Tal Formation, it is good to use a table to list out the lithologies. However, the second and third paragraph consists of quite a lot of repeated information. I suggest combining the two paragraphs by adding the depositional environment into the Lower and Upper Tai formation in the third paragraph. This can avoid giving a sense of repetitiveness (the table and the two paragraphs are eventually describing the same thing) to the reader.
 * 2) Having Subathu Formation as a sub-section in Singtali Formation may lead to confusion that one is a sub-division of another. I suggest changing the title of the main section into  "Singtai Formation and Subathu Formation" and then further divide them into two sub-section "Singtali Formation" and "Subathu Formation".
 * 3) The lithologies of Tal formation made up a large proportion in the page, but the Tectonic Significant has no mention of Tal formation. The Tal Formation lies between Late Proterozoic to Palaeozoic Cambrian, which may not be the main target of this page (I guess? As you are focusing on Palaeozoic-Mesozoic?). However, it would be smoother if Tal Formation is briefly mentioned in the Tectonic Significant section. You may consider to give a short introduction under the Tectonic significant to link up the three formations and emphasize that you are focusing on the Subathu and Singtali.

Your page is very informative and all the schematic figures you created are very clear. The use of tables is also very helpful for me to follow the content. :^) Jjyyu8 (talk) 03:26, 24 October 2016 (UTC)

Review from Cloud
Hi Tanya, here are a few suggestions for you page:

1) In Lesser Himalayan Strata part, I think you can add a google map outlining the boundary of Lesser Himalayan Strata to show a clearer picture of what scale/ which place you are referring to.

2) In Tal Formation, I like your use in diagram and lithology table. I agree with Jennifer that the content repeats itself in second and paragraph. I think that you can split two subsections in Lower Tal and Upper Tal formation and describe their lithologies and corresponding depositional environment. Besides, you can also add another column into your table for depositional environment (like Table 2) to give readers a clearer summary of what you have described.

3) For the Singtali Formation, I got a bit lost on which sections you were talking about. Is there any relationship of this formation to your schematic diagram? Because I can find Subathu Formation within the diagram but not this formation. I think you can illustrate better if this formation is also included in the diagram, or another diagram if it is messy to draw on the same one. Similar to Jennifer, renaming your title of this part can be a bit clearer to follow.

4) For the tectonic significance, I was also wondering if there is something for Tal formation because it is also a part of the sequence you have described. To make the presentation clearer, I think you can try to make an evolutionary diagram out of your current diagram for Singtali and Subathu formations with different geological time so that readers can see which come first/late and how did the whole setting changes through time. Cloudnstars (talk) 14:01, 24 October 2016 (UTC)

Review from Wayne
Hi Tanya, Here are a few comments on your wiki page =D


 * 1) A few confusion of sub-title format. The Subathu Formation sub-sub-title is within the Singtali Formation subtitle which makes me feel Sabathu is a part of Singtali. But indeed aren't they formation that Sabathu Formation laying on top of Singtali.
 * 2) The Lithology tables are lovely. I might suggest to combine all of the formations in LHS together (or instead make a stratigraphic column to show all lithology in LHS) to better show the whole section of the region.
 * 3) I spent some time to search the keywords (ophiolite obduction, paleohigh etc.) in the diagram from the text. Might make use of bold text to help reader refer the figure to the text.

Overall the presentation is clear and easy to understand. Great job.

Review from Christy
Hi Tanya! Your page is well-structured and informative. I love the tables showing different formations. They are very easy to follow. Here are some minor suggestions.

1)In the Tal formation section, you have mentioned a number of depositional environment in the table. It would be better if you elaborate more about them in the above paragraphs, especially in Lower Tal part.

2)In your introduction section, you mentioned about Tethyan Himalayan facies in the first part which makes me a bit confused. It might be better if you write about Lesser Himalayan facies first or mention less about the Tethyan Himalayan facies.

3)In the diagram "Gondwana Strata of LHS in Western and Central Nepal", it may looks better if you cut the blank space on the left side and enlarge the whole picture.

ChristyChristyyc (talk) 16:53, 21 November 2016 (UTC)

Review from Ron
1. In the table showing the major formations of the Lesser Himalayan Sequence, you may create a new column showing the geological time period instead of brackets after each formation.

2. Do you have the data of the total thickness of the Tal Formation? Since they are sedimentary rock stratigraphy. As I look at Wayne’s page, he has similar table as yours, but he does include the thickness of each unit.

3. You have mentioned the term ‘fossil' many times in the text. But as a curious reader, I would like to know what kind of fossil exactly is? For example, what kind of index plant fossils found in Lower and Upper Gondwanas? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ronlau817 (talk • contribs) 05:02, 22 November 2016 (UTC)

Review from Perry
The following are suggestions to your page:
 * Please check grammar. Eg "The ' ' below shows the major formations of the Lesser Himalayan facies, including the Tal Formation, Gondwana Strata, Singtali and Subathu Formations" this beginning of this sentence is missing a subject.
 * The word "Lesser Himalayan facies" in your introduction can be in bold characters as this is the main subject of your page.
 * First two images of your page are nearly identical and are located very close to each other, making one of them redundant.
 * For the image "Gondwana Strata of LHS in Western and Central Nepal" the white space is too large.

Perry11lawpt1 (talk) 10:29, 22 November 2016 (UTC)

Questions about names
What is the difference between these terms: Lesser Himalayan Strata, Lesser Himalayan facies, Lesser Himalayan Zone, Lesser Himalayan Sequence, and Lesser Himalayan sequence? They are all used in the article, but are they all the same thing, or are there subtle differences? If they are the same, mention it in the introduction, but after that just use one term. I note that "LHS" could refer to one of two possibilities from above. But on Wikipedia we don't use abbreviations like "LHS" because there is plenty of space! Graeme Bartlett (talk) 03:23, 23 November 2016 (UTC)