Talk:Let Me Sleep Beside You/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:31, 15 February 2022 (UTC)

I'm back from my few days away, so now's the time to start a new review! --K. Peake 19:31, 15 February 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * The release info should come between the recording and departure sentences
 * It's acceptable to have it this way (see Aftermath (Rolling Stones album) or even David Bowie (1969 album) which you reviewed). Plus, I find it flows better stating why it appeared on a compilation album first – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Pipe singles to Single (music)
 * ""Let Me Sleep Beside You" displays a" → "the song displays a"
 * Both done


 * A celli arrangement is sourced in the body, not strings
 * Ope – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * "The track was rejected by Deram" → "The song was rejected by Deram"
 * Done


 * Pipe compilation to Compilation album
 * That'd be WP:SEAOFBLUE though – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * "has seen release on compilations and reissues." → "has seen release on numerous albums." because it has been released on more than one of both
 * Done


 * "The song was also featured" → "A remixed version of the song was featured"
 * "A remixed version" – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * The publications part should be the second sentence of the second para instead, also add ones included
 * But why? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Done


 * "entire Toy album as part" → "entire Toy album, as part"
 * Done


 * "The remake was positively received." add why it is praised
 * "Reviewing Toy, Petridis called the remake "great",[30] a sentiment echoed by Pegg, who found it "splendid".[1]" No why presented – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)

Background and recording

 * Img looks good!
 * Add the release year of his self-titled debut album
 * Pipe singles to Single (music)
 * "turned it down but suggested" → "turned an offer down, but suggested"
 * Remove pipe on single since this should have been done earlier in the para
 * Above four done


 * Use something other than for to start the second sentence of the second para, to be less repetitive
 * Composing? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
 * Done

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * Done


 * The celli wikilink leads to a disambiguation page; fix this if it is kept, which I'm not sure of since the lead says strings?
 * That's awkward – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Pipe chord to Chord (music)
 * "such as "Let Me Sleep Beside You" and "Be My Wife"" → "such as 'Let Me Sleep Beside You' and 'Be My Wife'"
 * Both done

Release and aftermath

 * Any context for the quote?
 * "they requested he change" → "they requested that Bowie change"
 * Done


 * "The Stones, also a Decca artist," → "The Rolling Stones, also under Decca," since calling a band an artist makes no sense
 * I don't feel that way but K – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Pipe compilation to Compilation album
 * WP:SEAOFBLUE again? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)


 * I can't see the source, so I'm asking is it correct to state BBC sessions here when only one is specified or does the source say there was multiple ones?
 * Fixed


 * "and argues that it" → "and arguing that it"
 * "and impersonating Mick Jagger." → "and impersonating Jagger."
 * "cut of the film but was" → "cut of the film, but was"
 * "a more folk-inspired version of the track with" → "a more folk-inspired number with" to be less wordy
 * "called it superior to Bowie's entire debut album and acknowledged its sound" → "called the song superior to Bowie's entire debut album and acknowledged the sound"
 * Above five done

Toy version

 * Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * Sure


 * "along with other tracks Bowie wrote" → "along with other tracks he wrote"
 * Wikilink EMI
 * Both done

Personnel

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; smooth article so far! --K. Peake 09:50, 16 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing Kyle. Have a busy weekend ahead so I can't get to this til Tuesday at the least just so you're aware. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:37, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Queries above – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:07, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, no problems in the areas where you asked questions and your reasoning for not implementing anything is acceptable! --K. Peake 10:31, 23 February 2022 (UTC)