Talk:Lew Krausse Sr./GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:10, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Well, after reviewing Jr., it only makes sense that I should take on this one as well! —  Ghost River  17:10, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * "whom he helped win" "with whom he won"
 * Very pedantic: should be a period after "Jr" in "Lew Jr."

Early life

 * Switch order of sentences so that the fastball is sandwiched between his high school career & Athletics signing

Philadelphia Athletics

 * Today in voices I hear: an undergraduate professor telling me never to start a sentence with "However". Here, especially, because some people read one section at a time and the part about his signing is in a different section, the construction of the first sentence jolts the reader
 * "in place of them" "in their place"
 * Link unearned run and complete game
 * A little more awkward setup here: I think it can be made clearer that Mack was resting his pitchers so that they could be sharp for the Series and that this was still the regular season.
 * Link "doubleheaders" to Doubleheader (baseball) and home run
 * The idea that Sunday baseball was once prohibited in PA is wild to me; my godmother's family have Sunday season ticket packages

Sore arm

 * Make sure NYPL is linked to New York–Pennsylvania League (1923–1937) and not to the 1939–2020 club

Elmira

 * I understand it's because of the name change, but it's awkward that this is the one section that doesn't have the team name
 * Since it was Pioneers 3 out of 4 seasons, I think it's fine to call it Elmira Pioneers. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:22, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "won a career-high 24 games, setting the Elmira team record" "set a franchise record with a career-high 24 games won"
 * "6.5 games" "$6 1/2$ games"
 * Link Hazleton Mountaineers (baseball) and Wilkes-Barre (minor league baseball club)
 * "third baseman/outfielder" "third baseman and outfielder"

Cardinals and Red Sox organizations

 * No apostrophes needed in the header

Military and final season

 * "he was relying on curveballs to get hitters out" "he was best known for his "assortment of curveballs"" (or something of that sort, I just really like the newspaper quote)

Post-playing career

 * Commas around "the Phillies" instead of dashes
 * Link and capitalize Midwestern United States

Personal life

 * Link heart attack
 * Normally I'd ask for a cause of death but none of his obits seemed to mention it
 * I know, right? Doesn't help that 90% of the "Lew Krausse" obituaries are for his son... Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:26, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

General comments

 * Images are public domain and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks great, even the mirror sites have a low % match

Putting on hold now! —  Ghost River  17:36, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Excellent work, passing now! —  Ghost River  21:46, 31 January 2022 (UTC)