Talk:Lhasa (city)/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:54, 12 September 2015 (UTC)

Very comprehensive. I should have this to you tomorrow JAG  UAR   19:54, 12 September 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * "formerly Lhasa Prefecture, is a prefecture-level city, one of the main administrative divisions" - missing "and"?
 * Well it's saying that the prefecture-level city is one of the main divisions so I think it's OK.


 * "The Han Chinese population was mainly concentrated in urban areas" - still as of the 2000 census?
 * at the time..


 * "Chengguan District is also the center of Tibet in terms of transport, communications, education and religion, the most developed part of Tibet and a major tourist destination with sights such as the Potala Palace" - the sentence here is a bit choppy. It might sound better as Chengguan District is also the center of Tibet in terms of transport, communications, education and religion, as well as being the most developed part of Tibet and a major tourist destination with sights such as the Potala Palace...
 * Done.


 * "Contact with India began along" - might be worth changing this to the Indian continent
 * Continent? It's a country bordering Tibet!
 * I meant when it was a separate continent millions of years ago, sorry I should've been clearer! JAG  UAR   21:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)


 * "The Lhasa valley is roughly the same latitude as the southern US" - should read as full "United States"
 * Done.

just changed it to and jugs.
 * "Products include braziers, flower pots, vases, jugs and so on" - and vice versa?
 * " China National Highway 318 runs through Qüxü County from Lhasa" - China National Highway 318 is already linked above in this section
 * Delinked.


 * "said to have been founded in 1055 by Dromtön, a pupil of Atiśa" - "student"? I can't check this source to see what it says as it's in Chinese nevermind, the source says "pupil"!
 * "Perhaps 250,000 people live in the city and in towns" approximately
 * Done


 * "The first drug rehabilitation center in Tibet was being constructed in Duilongdeqing County in 2009. It would provide physiological rehabilitation, psychological therapy" - I think this is in the wrong tense
 * Added "was planned"

On hold
This is a very well written and comprehensive article, even deserving of FA status. I hope I didn't miss anything vital out, but it took me an hour just to read through the prose (and I checked through most of the sources), but most of it is fine. Once all of the above are clarified then this should easily pass  JAG  UAR   15:34, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

We're all good now I think, thanks for the review.♦ Dr. Blofeld  18:59, 15 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for addressing them! Very good article. Might be worth taking to FA one day  JAG  UAR   19:02, 15 September 2015 (UTC)