Talk:Li Rui/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 04:08, 3 January 2022 (UTC) Nominator: Ganesha811 (talk · contribs) at 23:36, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

General
Following terms are linked multiple times in the article. Suggesting to import this script. They should be linked only twice–once in the lead section, and once in the prose:
 * Deng Xiaoping
 * Great Leap Forward
 * Cultural Revolution
 * Xi Jinping
 * These issues should now be fixed, thanks for recommending the script! Ganesha811 (talk) 01:03, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

Detailed

 * Change the short description from "Chinese politician" to "Chinese politician (1917–2019)"
 * The lead is pretty long. Suggesting to trim it to 2 paragraphs.
 * Chinese politician, historian — don't link these general terms
 * By 1958, he had become the vice-minister of the Ministry of Water Resources, the youngest vice-minister in — repetition of 'vice-minister'
 * People's Republic of China (both in the lead and the prose) — why not just China?
 * to the attention of Mao Zedong — specify the position of Mao then
 * his unwillingness to give preference to the children of influential party members cost him his position — "cost him his position" should be rephrased.
 * in Pingjiang County, Hunan Province in — Missing MOS:GEOCOMMA
 * in the late 1930s - upon his — should be em-dash (or en-dash, maybe)
 * of the Three Gorges Dam - Mao — same as above
 * he proved so willing to — I don't get this
 * In 1945 Li was made — comma after '1945'
 * in China's civil war — "in the Chinese civil war"
 * Mao hired Li as his — Well, hired or appointed?
 * OK, so after simply criticizing Mao, Li was sent to political exile, his wife divorced him, and he had to teach in mountains! It'll make a nice DYK hook.
 * Agreed, it's quite a story and he must have been quite the guy! Ganesha811 (talk) 01:03, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * according to the New York Times — should be " according to The New York Times"
 * Li personally witnessed — remove 'personally'
 * “sharp” — fix the quotes (“ to ")
 * The above issues should all be addressed now, assuming I've understood your comment on "sharp" correctly. Working on the other issues shortly. Ganesha811 (talk) 16:21, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

Images

 * All good.