Talk:Life of Pi (film)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bait30 (talk · contribs) 23:40, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I'd like to review this if you don't mind. Life of Pi is one of my favorite novels (along with Siddhartha) and I enjoyed the movie a lot. I'm pretty new at GA stuff so don't hesitate to let me know if you think I messed up.  Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 23:40, 9 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I'll review prose first going down the page by section, then do images, then do references last.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 07:09, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead/infobox

 * "Directed by Ang Lee, the film's adapted screenplay was written by David Magee, and it stars": the structure of the sentence suggests that Ang Lee directed the screenplay, not the film. On the same note, "it" refers to the screenplay when it should refer to the film. (1a)
 * Reworded. Rusted AutoParts  02:25, 13 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "51st New York Film Festival": should be 50th (2)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:09, 13 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The film had its worldwide premiere as the opening film of the 51st New York Film Festival at both the Walter Reade Theater and Alice Tully Hall in New York City on September 28, 2012.": I feel like this whole sentence is relatively significant information that should be in the body of the text, but currently is not. (1b)
 * "It was nominated for three Golden Globe Awards which included the Best Picture – Drama and the Best Director and won the Golden Globe Award for Best Original Score.": would be more concise if changed to "It was nominated for three Golden Globe Awards, including Best Picture – Drama and Best Director, and won for Best Original Score." (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The film was shot between": Either "The film was shot in" or "Filming was split between" would be more clear. (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "India, Taiwan and Montreal, Quebec": would be better to remove Quebec. Might be confusing because of the commas and the fact it's in a list. (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Infobox "country" section: this isn't within the scope of the review but why are there five references for United States?
 * I can only surmise there was a big to-do over this. I am seeing a small discussion on the talk page about it. Rusted AutoParts  02:17, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 07:09, 10 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Infobox budget and box office: it would probably be ok to remove the references here since they're cited in the "box office" section.
 * I do feel it’s necessary to keep sources there too, if only to keep consistent with other film articles that source the box office in the infobox. Rusted AutoParts  02:17, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Plot

 * There's nothing wrong within the scope of GA, but to me it seems like there's quite a bit of MOS:OVERLINKING in this section and the lead so far. For example, I don't think Pi Patel needs to be linked to the Pi Patel section of the article for the novel, especially when that section has less information about Pi Patel than the article for the film does. "Acidic" does not need to be linked. "Adapted screenplay" in the lead does not need to be linked. I looked at multiple other articles for movies based on adapted screenplays, and none of them linked to film adaptation.

Cast
 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 07:32, 10 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Elie Alouf as Francis: the note should be moved to a separate Notes section at the end of the article. (1b)
 * I just took it out, I didn't see it's purpose. Rusted AutoParts  02:53, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Production

 * "write an adapted screenplay": it's kind of redundant. It's not like he's going to write an unadapted screenplay. More concise to just say "write a screenplay. (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:58, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Jeunet began writing the adapted screenplay": same as above. (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:58, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Jeunet eventually left the project.": should have a source. (2)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:58, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "we're the vessels": unlink vessels. Vessels in this case isn't even referring to watercraft. It's referring to a person who has a particular quality or who is used for a particular purpose. (1)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:58, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "play the adult Pi, Adil Hussain would play Pi's father, while Tabu was in talks to play the role of Pi's mother.": grammar. Should be "play the adult Pi, and Adil Hussain..." (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  02:58, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "and concluded in Montreal, Quebec, Canada": this unnecessary disambiguation can be made more concise. (1a)
 * Could you clarify this a bit for me? Rusted AutoParts  02:58, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I feel like since Montreal is clearly the primary topic, there's no need to say Montreal, Quebec, Canada. Just Montreal is good per MOS:GEO.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 03:14, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  23:17, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 02:09, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The R&H VFX (Visual Effects) Supervisor": unlink VFX as it's already linked above. Also, "Visual Effects" and "Supervisor" should be lowercase (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  23:17, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Music

 * section seems good to me

Distribution

 * "Life of Pi's financial success had been under review.": not sure what this means. (1a)
 * I rephrased to "was uncertain". Rusted AutoParts  23:23, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "It looks like chances are very slim that the film will earn back its production and marketing costs let alone turn a profit.": I think you need to duplicate the ref over here since it's a direct quote. not sure though. (2b)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  23:23, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 02:18, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "including a one-hour making-of special entitled A Filmmaker's Epic Journey, two featurettes focusing on the film's visual effects, as well as two": there should be an "and" instead of a comma between "Journey" and "two" (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  23:23, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Reception

 * "in Australia, Chile": should be "in Australia and Chile," (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  22:37, 16 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "the biggest Hollywood hit of the year": kinda peacock-y. (1b)
 * Reworded, does that work? Rusted AutoParts  22:37, 16 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "and is now the tenth highest grossing Hollywood release of all time": MOS:RELTIME. (1b)
 * Reworded, does that work? Rusted AutoParts  22:37, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Everything you have done thus far is good. Article is definitely on track to becoming a GA.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 19:03, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Roger Ebert of the Chicago Sun-Times gave Life of Pi four out of four": is it four out of four stars? or just a four out of four? (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  20:37, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "as well as "one of the best films of the year."": citation needs to go here as well. (2)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  20:37, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Comparatively": this means "relatively", and that doesn't really make sense in this context. Maybe "similarly"? (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  20:37, 17 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Marjolaine Gout and AO Scott quotes: same as above. should be a citation after each quotation. (2)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  00:14, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Last paragraph of critical reception ("The film has been described as... ) is a run-on sentence. Also, is "(see Gaia hypothesis)" supposed to be within the quote? (1a)
 * I believe I've fixed it. Rusted AutoParts  00:14, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * In the "Accolades" section, everything after the Academy Awards section is unreferenced. (2)
 * Trimmed out the unsourced, sourced Golden Globes. If there's a separate article for awards the Accolades section is typically reserved to go over the more notable awards. Rusted AutoParts  00:14, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Despite the Oscar for Best Visual": might be more clear to say "Despite winning the Oscar..." (1a)
 * ✅ Rusted AutoParts  00:14, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "green key colour": what is the MOS:ENGVAR for this article? Dates are MDY, but this is a Commonwealth spelling for colo(u)r.
 * I took the U out. Rusted AutoParts  00:14, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "in order to raise awareness for what is happening to the effects industry.": what is happening? the connection between how this issue, which seems localized to R&H, relates to some industry-wide issue is not clear/apparent. (1a)
 * Reworded. Rusted AutoParts  00:14, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 02:48, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * " In an April 7, 2011, ACA monitor, Gina Johnson, wrote that "last week we almost killed King".": The quotes in this paragraph need sources directly after. Also, who or what is "King"? It is not mentioned anywhere else in the article. (1a/2)
 * Added an unquoted line to clarify who King is. Rusted AutoParts  00:14, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Images
 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 02:54, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Suraj Sharma: the caption is kind of ambiguous as to whether it is Pi or Sharma who is 16. Maybe something like "Suraj Sharma was cast as the 16 year old Pi Patel" (6b)
 * Clarified. Rusted AutoParts  00:15, 18 October 2020 (UTC)