Talk:Lights and Sounds (song)/GA1

GA Review
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 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * "The song's lyrics are based on the band's pressures on coping with the success that they were enduring when writing songs for their second album." &mdash; Remove "that" betweeen "success" and "they" and remove "pressures on", as it sounds redundant.
 * Done.
 * "The song, itself, won the 2006 Spike Video Game Award..." &mdash; "itself" is unnecessary as it's obvious we're referring to the song
 * Done.
 * "...it was a relief"." &mdash; Move the quotation mark after the period.
 * Not according to this.
 * I knew about that. AFAIK when a period should go inside the quote (end of a quoted sentence) and outside the quote (end of the main sentence), the one inside is written. However, I can't find a MOS rule about it, so I'm going to pass this. Admiral Norton (talk) 23:47, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
 * "Longineu Parsons' plays a nonstop drumming rhythm..." &mdash; Why is there an apostrophe after Parsons' last name?
 * I'm pretty sure its supposed to be there, but I've removed it.
 * "Afterward, the song spent 11 weeks on the chart, before retiring of April 19, 2006." &mdash; Remove "2006".
 * Done.
 * Per WP:LQ, Greenwald's and Beaujour's quotes should have the period inside the quotation marks.
 * Done.
 * "...but when it came time to start production for the music video, it was..." &mdash; Change to "...when the time came to start production, it was..."
 * Done.
 * "Then it is followed with a slow motion sequence, as it shows the band continuing the song, still in a fast pace." &mdash; Change to "As the video shows the band continuing the song still at a fast pace, the effect is followed by a slow motion sequence."
 * Done.
 * Per MOS:SLASH, use spaced slashes (" / ") instead of unspaced ones ("/") when quoting the lyrics. Also, do not separate lyrics in sentences by commas or colons, treat them as ordinary quotes.
 * Done.
 * It would be useful to direct the Yellowcard Wiki link to the specific entry about the song. Admiral Norton (talk) 22:44, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
 * If there's anything else, please let me know. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:10, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
 * These were all of my concerns. Admiral Norton (talk) 23:47, 13 March 2009 (UTC)