Talk:Lincoln Village (Columbus, Ohio)

Final comments from class editor: Ryanlaber (talk) 01:17, 15 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Great job thus far.
 * This sentence is awkward and could use rephrasing. Who began construction? Not the area.  "In 1953 an area located two miles west of Columbus began the lengthy construction process on 1,170 acres of Ohio farmland."
 * Keep the article focused on Lincoln Village. There is a lot of information on Mr. Lincoln that is not necessary.  Also, the headings "Auto Insurace" and "Farm Bureau Mutual - Nationwide" are at the same organizational level as "History" and "Demographics".  This needs to be changed.
 * Fix text around Westland Mall. I would combine the sections "Westland Mall" and "Decay of Westland Mall" to keep the article focused.
 * Try to add more to the transportation section than just average commute times.
 * Growth Rates should not be it's own high-level topic. Consider putting this in Demographics.
 * Because the area of this neighborhood/development is so small, it should be easy to describe the types of housing options and types of commercial or industrial spaces in the area.
 * Some pictures are a must.

=Instructor Comments No. 2=

Well-written

 * I see you incorporated some new things, but this article is really lacking. See my previous feedback - you need to utilize it.

Verifiable with no original research

 * Needs work

Broad in its coverage

 * There is a lot you can do with this - I've given you several things to look at.

Neutral

 * Fine on this front

Stable

 * No Comments.

Illustrated

 * You need to get photos in here.

Kenitzer.1 (talk) 15:44, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

Ryanlaber (talk) 04:47, 9 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Consider rephrasing: "The community was developed to have all the essentials such as a shopping center, schools, and parks, and to incorporate safety considerations such as not positioning the homes on street corners to eliminate blind intersections."
 * It would be great to see a map locating Lincoln Village in the context of Greater Columbus.
 * If a citation applies to an entire paragraph, put the citation at the end of that paragraph.
 * Focus on not just presenting statistic but giving some (objective) analysis. Often figures & graphs are useful for relating quantitative information.
 * Try to incorporate all components of a good article found at: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Education_Program:Ohio_State_University/City_and_Regional_Planning_%28Fall_2014%29

http://www.neighborhoodscout.com/oh/columbus/lincoln-village//ref>

A few comments:


 * You've identified deficiencies of the previously existing, which is great but I don't see where your changes to the existing article are.
 * Start updating the demographic information, or better yet: build a table showing it over time (since this is a CDP this is likely possible to do).
 * Do some research on Nationwide Realty. Why did they develop this? Search the Columbus Public Library records of the Dispatch Archives.
 * This may help you with that: There was an article titled: Man with a Mission. Time, 0040781X, 8/17/1953, Vol. 62, Issue 7 on Lincoln Village. It is available through WorldCat.
 * Get some images in there. Those can help "tell the story."
 * How is this project related to Westland Mall?
 * Who is it named for? HINT: Not Abraham Lincoln, but someone tied to Nationwide Insurance... like maybe their founder?
 * On that topic: Look at the book titled "Vice President in Charge of Revolution" (OSU has it in their Depository)
 * Look at the Murray Hill Page as well (its inside your area) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Murray_Hill,_Columbus,_Ohio
 * Also Here: https://www.facebook.com/HistoricalWestSideColumbusOhio/posts/664324023626042

Keep working at it!

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