Talk:Lion Attacking a Dromedary/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 16:36, 1 October 2020 (UTC)

Happy to attack this one...

Lead section

 * Who is Édouard Verreaux?
 * added -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:35, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 'Barbary’, not barbary.


 * fixed -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:35, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Link diorama.
 * Okay -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:35, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * As it stands the caption—possibly the first thing read—might give readers the impression that the work is modern. I would amend it to something like ‘The restored Lion Attacking a Dromedary in 2018’.
 * sounds good -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:35, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The last two paragraphs relate to events many years later, and so would be better in a separate paragraph.
 * I don't have an objection -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:35, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I notice the exhibit is also referred to as Arab Courier Attacked by Lions. Worth including in the lead?
 * I listed it in the note. There have been many names for this diorama -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:35, 1 October 2020 (UTC)

History

 * Link taxidermist; X-rays (capital X needed); DNA testing (Genetic testing); symposium (Academic conference).
 * sure -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:15, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ❌ ...part of Maison Verreaux. - this needs copy editing to make its meaning clearer.
 * Who is Antoine-Louis Barye?
 * added that he was a french sculptor -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:15, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Ref 2a (Ross) only partly verifies the sentence that precedes it.
 * added Rouvalis for the discussion of the skins -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:15, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ...the museum conducted x-rays and DNA testing of the taxidermied animals… - I would improve the prose by amending to ‘...the museum conducted tests on the animals using X-rays and DNA analysis techniques…’, or something similar.
 * sure -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:15, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ❌ Verreaux worked with his brother, not on his own, according to some sources used in the article.
 * A citation is needed to verify that X-rays have ben used.
 * Done -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:15, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Ref 3 (Molina) states: “He confirms that the courier on display in Pittsburgh is a plaster mannequin,…”, not that it was mostly made of plaster, as written in the article.
 * There is human bones in it that were discovered in 2016, after that source was written. Adding a source for the bones. -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:15, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * equivalent to $1,537 in 2019 – needs to be cited.
 * I used Template:Inflation without a source for the inflation in The Minute Man (an FA) without any complaints. I also don't think this falls under direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons because the 1898 number is cited. -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:15, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * That's useful to know, thanks. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:43, 1 October 2020 (UTC)

Depiction

 * ...considered to be Verreaux's masterpiece. - it's considered as only by Molina in her article. A citation is needed to show it was generally considered to be a masterpiece.
 * I attributed the opinion -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:29, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The body of a female lion lies in front of the camel with a long gun on top of it. - doesn’t appear to be verified by Ref 4 (Rouvalis).
 * fixed -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:29, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I think Ref 12 (Poliquin) should read p. 97, not 91.
 * Yup. My bad -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:29, 1 October 2020 (UTC)

On hold
I'll put the article onhold for a week until 8 October to allow time for my comments to be addressed. Amitchell125 (talk) 20:35, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I responded to your prompts -- Guerillero &#124;  Parlez Moi  21:36, 1 October 2020 (UTC)

Passing
Apart from a couple of minor points highlighted in red, the article is in good shape. Passing now, nice work. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:54, 1 October 2020 (UTC)