Talk:Lionhearted/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 21:53, 2 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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We are reunited once again for this review! --K. Peake 06:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The infobox recording date of 2014 is not sourced in the body anywhere
 * Removed
 * WP:OVERLINK of Porter Robinson under songwriters
 * Fixed
 * Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * Fixed
 * The first sentence should mention it being from his debut studio album, Worlds (2014)
 * Added
 * Move the release sentence to the fourth of the paragraph instead and change to the album rather than its title
 * Did something similar to "Sad Machine". Skyshifter   talk  21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
 * "The track was one of" → "It was one of"
 * Done
 * I would suggest starting a new para at the Passion Pit and re-word it to something like "The song was noted for the influence from Passion Pit."
 * Did something similar to "Sad Machine". Skyshifter   talk  21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Add after the above sentence one about the song's critical reviews
 * As with "Sad Machine" I prefer adding sentences regarding reviews only when sources explicitly comment on it. In the case of "Sad Machine", critics generally agreed on its atmospheric feeling, but here I don't think there's an easy way to summarize the reviews, otherwise it would get too extensive. However I added another sentence saying that critics noted that "it was the first on Worlds with a faster tempo". Skyshifter   talk  21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
 * "a music video was" → "an accompanying music video was" with the wikilink, add info about the synopsis too
 * Done
 * Mention which charts it entered
 * I think that's too much info considering the length of the article; it would be almost the same as the last paragraph of "Release and reception".

Background and composition

 * Add info about the synths to the audio sample too
 * I don't see that info in the article, but I added that "Multiple critics found it influenced by Passion Pit".
 * Add the release year of Space Invaders in brackets
 * Done
 * Pipe electro-house to Electro house
 * Done
 * Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication)
 * Done
 * "found it inspired by Passion Pit" → "found it inspired by the band" to avoid using their name so much
 * Done
 * Merge the Las Vegas Weekly and Spin sentences by using a comma with "while"
 * I don't think these sentences are related enough, unlike the previous one about Passion Pit.

Release and reception

 * "On June 3, "Lionhearted" was" → "On June 3, 2014, "Lionhearted" was" and move [6] to being solely at the end of the sentence
 * Done
 * "on the 17th, accompanied by a music video" → "on June 17, accompanied by a music video" with the wikilink
 * Done
 * Put parts of the longer reviews quoted into your own words per MOS:OVERQUOTE
 * Done
 * 'St Elmo's Fire' should be surrounded by single speech marks and piped to St Elmo's fire
 * Done
 * Pipe Variance to Variance (magazine)
 * Done
 * Pipe Beat to Beat (magazine)
 * That's a red link, and it's currently linked to Beat Magazine.
 * "described it as" → "described the song as"
 * Done
 * Mention what the positions the song charted at were, although I do not see the Ultratop Dance one sourced
 * Done

Track listing

 * Good

Personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 * Done

Weekly charts

 * I can not see the Dance position in the source

Year-end charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Worldwide → Various
 * Done
 * You need to add sources for these releases
 * Done

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; this went by very quickly! --K. Peake 20:33, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
 * all responded! Skyshifter   talk  21:36, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I have done some copy editing for you now, although you still need to add various sources to back up the Apple Music releases being in various locations; try about three or four regions please. --K. Peake 09:09, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I'm having trouble with that (i.e. I can't find the Lionhearted single on streaming services) so I've removed the section. Skyshifter   talk  09:20, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, well done on cleaning this up! --K. Peake 11:20, 21 June 2024 (UTC)