Talk:List of film directors of the Dutch East Indies

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Hi, here's a few general comments on the prose portion of the article:
 * Just a thought about the first sentence, but you might explain a bit of the timing with the Dutch control and Indonesian independence in a footnote.
 * Added. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 23 September 2012 (UTC)


 * "The first directors in the country, Heuveldorp and G. Kruger, were of European or mixed descent.[5] The first ethnic Chinese director" Slightly repetitive openings of consecutive sentences here.
 * Reworked — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 23 September 2012 (UTC)


 * "Heuveldorp and G. Kruger, were of European or mixed descent" Reading this makes me think it's not 100% known which ethnicity they were. Is that right?
 * Not sure about Heuveldorp. Kruger was reportedly Indo, possibly of German extract based on his name (that German bit is not in sources) — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 23 September 2012 (UTC)


 * "Still others, including Albert Balink and Ismail, were journalists by trade. Together, they directed some 100 films, at times working collaboratively" My thinking after reading this is that they co-directed about 100 films, is that it? If not, perhaps "Between them" instead of "Together"?
 * Sounds good. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 23 September 2012 (UTC)


 * Otherwise prose looks good, I made a few small copyedits. Mark Arsten (talk) 22:38, 23 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 23 September 2012 (UTC)