Talk:Little Athletics/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 21:05, 24 August 2014 (UTC)

I'll take this. give me a couple of days to review this.  ΤheQ Editor  Talk? 21:05, 24 August 2014 (UTC)
 * , just a friendly reminder about this GAN. It has been a couple of days.  NickGibson3900 Talk Sign my Guestbook Contributions 07:55, 28 August 2014 (UTC)


 * Sorry, my laptop's internet went down just as I clicked the submit button. I re wrote it. Cheers,  ΤheQ Editor   Talk? 18:22, 28 August 2014 (UTC)

Lead

 * It's too much like an ad. 3 paragraphs dedicated in explaining how great "Little Athletics" is? You should also consider including a brief history of it. ✅
 * The body doesn't mention anything about "Little A's or Little Aths" ✅

Little Athletics Events

 * Change heading to "Events" ✅
 * What do all those abbreviations stand for? (VIC) (NSW) (QLD) (SA) (WA) (TAS) (ACT) ✅
 * Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement. ✅

Structure and Governance

 * Consider merging the two paragraphs together. ✅

History

 * There are a lot of short sub sections in section 3.2.1. Perhaps merging the short ones together would help. ✅
 * The sub section titles contain peacock phrases. It sounds more like an essay. You should just include the year. ✅
 * Section 3.2.2 contains a lot of in line citations to the same ref. Consider only adding it at the end of the paragraph. ✅
 * Same thing with section "3.2.3", "3.2.4", and "3.2.5" ✅
 * "Geelong brach" - is this a typo? ✅
 * "However Billingham still could not get support for Little Athletics from VAAA instead they suggested to drop the junior competition and focus on the rapidly expanding senior one." - no punctuation in between? ✅
 * "VAAA and they accepted both" - should be "VAAA and both were accepted" ✅
 * "200 boys and girls more than 200 boys and girls" - doesn't make sense ✅

Current

 * "little athletes" - should just be athletes ✅

Other

 * one dead link. See here ✅
 * External Links go after the References ✅

Reply
Thanks for the review. I think I have fixed all the problems with this article.  NickGibson3900 Talk Sign my Guestbook Contributions 07:31, 29 August 2014 (UTC)