Talk:Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk • contribs • count ) 20:26, 12 September 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

This article is in decent shape, but a few minor things require fixing
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * A lot of activity - is this stable?
 * Overall, the article has been very stable. Mostly rewriting and summarizing the text over the past few months. -Fnlayson (talk) 18:18, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Good luck with improving this article!
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Good luck with improving this article!
 * Good luck with improving this article!

Comments Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:27, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor links to 1 redirect which points back. F-22 (redirect page) -> Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor ✅
 * 2) Spelling errors: "identifing" ✅
 * 3) Links required: supercruise" ✅
 * 4) Awkward text:
 * 5) A stealth ordnance pod and pylon is being developed, designed to carry additional weapons internally Considered deleting "designed" ✅
 * 6) However, the stealth features of the F-22 require additional maintenance, decreasing their mission capable rate to approximately 62–70% You've use "however" in two sentences running. ✅
 * 7) In December 2007, Secretary of the Air Force Michael Wynne requested that the F-22 be deployed to the Middle East, Secretary of Defense Gates rejected this option. Run-on sentence. Replace comma with full stop. ✅
 * 8) In August 2011 the grounding was temporarily waived so that fighters could be flown out of the path of a hurricane One sentence paragraph belongs in previous paragraph. Preferably as the second-last sentence. ✅
 * 9) The aircraft's radar-absorbing metallic skin is a principal cause of maintenance, skin repairs account for more than half of all maintenance.'' Run-on sentence. Replace comma with semi-colon or full stop. ✅
 * 10) A source of maintenance problems is that many components require custom hand-fitting and are not interchangeable. Should be: "Another source of maintenance problems'" ✅
 * 11) The canopy visibility degrades more rapidly than expected, refurbishments are at 331 flight hours on average, instead of the required 800 hours Run-on sentence. Suggest replacing comma with conjunction The canopy visibility degrades more rapidly than expected, with refurbishments at 331 flight hours on average, instead of the required 800 hours ✅
 * 12) All F-22s were grounded after the crash, operations resumed following a review. Another run-on sentence. Replace comma with full stop. ✅
 * 13) An Air Force Materiel Command investigation found that Cooley momentarily lost consciousness during a high-G maneuver then ejected when he found himself too low to recover Insert comma before "then" ✅


 * Thanks for the review. We'll work on continued improvements to the article. -Fnlayson (talk) 16:03, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I think it would make a Featured Article now. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:30, 3 October 2011 (UTC)