Talk:Lonsdale Belt/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 20:08, 28 June 2018 (UTC)

Will take a look at this, will post review in the next day or so. Kosack (talk) 20:08, 28 June 2018 (UTC)


 * Thank you. Just in the process of completing the outright winners section. been away working recently. Okeeffemarc (talk) 23:44, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

Here's my initial review

Lead

 * I think the opening may need rewording slightly. If Lord Lonsdale Challenge Belt is the official title, then open with that. I would say "The Lord Lonsdale Challenge Belt, commonly known as the Lonsdale Belt, ..." would be more suitable. The Challenge Belt title can be mentioned further on. ✅
 * In at the start of the final sentence needs a capital letter. ✅
 * Could the lead be expanded? Brief mentions of  longest reigning, most reigns, first champion, etc. ✅ (added a brief couple of sentences, wary of repeating myself too much in the article, please advise if you feel it needs more)

The National Sporting Club

 * Link Lord Lonsdale to the relevant person. ✅
 * Should champion be capitalised? Not in this context, so corrected
 * Final sentence of the first paragraph is unsourced. ✅
 * "the NSC British Lightweight title 8 November 1909" insert on before the date. ✅

First holders of NSC Challenge belts

 * Insert a space between each flag and the name of the fighter, looks a bit squashed together at the moment.✅

First holders of the B.B.B.of.C. Lonsdale belt

 * Again, use a space between fighter and flag for this table and the current holders table below.✅

Changes

 * Excerpt doesn't need to be capitalised.✅

Theft

 * "Bobby Vanzie Come home to Bradford", sentence needa rewording.✅
 * In McAteer's entry, sons > son's.✅

Outright winner

 * Capitalise Lonsdale in the image caption.✅
 * Is unnecessary capitalised in the first sentence.✅

2 time outright winners of Lonsdale Belt

 * Spacing between fighter and flag in table and table below.✅

Reply
Good afternoon, no worries, thanks for taking the time to give it all a thorough look. I have amended your post ticking off or commenting on your corrections. Please let me know what you think.

Kind regards, Okeeffemarc (talk) 20:04, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

Origin

 * Should original be capitalised in the image caption? No so have changed
 * "A total of 22 Lonsdale belts were issued by the NSC, and of these 20 were won outright.", need a ref for this sentence as it's the end of the paragraph. ✅

Outright winners of Lonsdale Belt

 * I went to correct Charlie Magri and Carl Johansson's entries as they used lower case for the fighters name but noticed that you were deliberately piping the link to that. Is there a reason for that? No just missed that! Lots of data entry gives you snow blindness. Corrected now.

Reply
All done. Thanks very much Okeeffemarc (talk) 15:00, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
 * A nice piece of work that meets the required GA criteria in my opinion, promoting. Kosack (talk) 15:51, 3 July 2018 (UTC)