Talk:Lorenzo Palacios Quispe

Algunas críticas
I'm not an expert on Chacalón, and I'm certainly not an english professor. But I can say this article requires a bit of cleanup.

- From the "Biography" section: "... become a thieve with the noble aim to support his family..."

Please note that the correct spelling is "thief." Also, please check for NPOV.

- Same paragraph as above: "... already at the time, together with his brother, they were already active as a street traders and singers ..."

This sentence would best be replaced with something as: "... who was already active as a singer and a street trader, alongside his brother..."

I have no idea what the original writer meant by "street trader," however. ¿Podrían explicarlo en español?

- The rest of the paragraph, and the rest of the article is a grammatical disaster, with excerpts such as: "... he had his started first...", and "... his wife Dora give birth his first child ..."

- I understand that this article is a stub, but there is no mention of Chacalón's untimely death, or his other children, or his impact in Peruvian society. One cannot board a bus in Lima, without a street kid climbing up and singing "Soy un muchacho provinciano", at any point during the trip.

Other than that, deep thanks to whoever first dove in, and started this article. I do believe it could be the start of something good. However, and I said, I'm painfully unqualified to write about Chacalón, so I will not try. If any Chacalón fans out there do want to give it a try, by all means.

--kenohki 03:52, 27 July 2007 (UTC)