Talk:Louboutins (song)/GA1

GA Review
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I am the reviewer: Peter Griffin   &bull;  Talk2Me   18:00, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * In first 2 sentences, American is written 3 times. Change
 * Louboutind?
 * "with the heads held high" fix.
 * "for swiftly recovering from the fall to continue the performance" re-write for tense and clarity.
 * " It made its radio premier a day later on KIIS-FM's On Air With Ryan Seacrest before being sent for radio adds on December 8, 2009 and digital download on December 21, 2009 in the United States and Canada." The digital-download part should be another sentence, this way its run-on.
 * "but it failed" but failed.
 * i've fixed all these issues. LOL about "Louboutind" --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  19:45, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Background

 * Why is Tricky linked again but not The-Dream? Overlink
 * Brandy is again overlink.
 * "Norwood personally confirmed this when she said that "It is true I had a song called 'Louboutins' that I loved and still love to pieces, but God never blesses you with another person’s blessing".[2] However when Norwood lost her record deal Stewart said "we didn't want the record to die" and so it was offered to Lopez who subsequently fell in love with the song." re-write. Example. "Norwoods issued a personal statement etc."
 * fixed per recommendations --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  19:49, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Composition

 * "Of the song's conception Stewart said." Comma needed.
 * "Prefix said that the record didn't sound like a typical Tricky Stewart and The-Dream production, but that "Louboutins" is used as a metaphor for female empowerment." Is that a quote?. Also whats the correlation in between saying it doesn't sounds like a Tricky record, but its for female empowerment. Its good info, but the sentence leads you to believe your gonna read something else.
 * resolved --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  19:54, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * Looks good, however I think you should do an intro line like "The song received generally mixed to negative reviews from music critics.
 * resolved --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  20:01, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Chart Performance

 * "It is the second consecutive song from Lopez's upcoming 2010 album, Love?" What is? you should begin with "Louboutins" or "The song".
 * "However despite this" Comma needed.
 * resolved --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  20:03, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Live Performances

 * "2009 American Music Awards which aired on November 22, 2009." Comma needed.
 * "She later confirmed this on a KIIS FM interview with DJ SKEE, where she confirmed" Repetitive.
 * "Lopez's fall dwas" Was.
 * "The Daily Mail" Should be fully linked. Only Daily News is linked.
 * "However according to The Daily Mail Lopez" Comma Needed.
 * "However according to The Daily Mail Lopez responded in a professional way. Ryan Seacrest called it "the greatest recovery ever!"[23] and The Daily Mail's Natalie Trombetta agreed saying "ever the professional, Jennifer quickly recovered her poise and carried on with the show." There is no flow. You go from Daily News to Seacrest and back to Daily News. Start with Daily News, finish them, then proceed to Seacrest.
 * "that the tumble more talked about than the actually single itself" Was more.
 * "She was also booked to perform on the season six finale of So You Think You Can Dance on December 16, 2009. The performance took on a holiday theme and was choreographed by the show's team." She was booked to perform. Did she?
 * "Her final performance of the year came on December 31, 2009 where Lopez performed "Louboutins" Re-write.
 * all resolved --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  20:11, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Music Video

 * "Christian Louboutin said that out his appreciation" Out of his, or something else.
 * "would work on specially" Re-write.
 * "and according to Rap-Up Lopez was scheduled to film the music video for the song in January 2010." Run-on, also comma needed after "Rap-Up.
 * "She outlined the concept of the video in a radio interview. "It's gonna be a lot of dancing" Make one sentence. """" saying, "
 * "Lopez's leave from Epic Records in 2010 the video" Comma needed after 2010.
 * fixed per requests --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  20:14, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Charts

 * The song wasn't released on any other worldwide chart?
 * A quick search of aCharts, Amazon International shows the song never charted internationally because it wasn't released internationally. --  Lil_℧niquℇ №1 &#124;  talk2me  19:59, 20 September 2010 (UTC)

Overall
Overall you did a really swell job Unique, fix up these MoS and other small errors and I'll be happy to pass the article. Great job!-- Peter Griffin  &bull;  Talk2Me   18:40, 20 September 2010 (UTC)