Talk:Love, Blactually/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: M.Mario (talk · contribs) 15:35, 3 October 2012 (UTC)

Reviewing per request at my talk page.

Infobox

 * Put who the two guest actors played

Lead

 * Space between Actually.The
 * Rmv "however", not needed.
 * Are you going to put Brian (actor's name)?


 * "It received mixed to positive reviews from critics for its storyline and many cultural references." -> just put mixed.
 * "It received mixed to positive reviews from critics for its storyline and many cultural references." -> no reviewer talked about cultural references, so put; "* "It received mixed reviews from critics for its storyline".
 * "According to Nielsen ratings, it was viewed in 9.2 million homes in its original airing" -> "According to Nielsen ratings, it was watched by 9.2 million viewers in its original airing".
 * "along with several recurring guest voice actors for the series" - Reword. -> "along with several recurring voice actors from the series".

Plot

 * During a costume party, Lois suggests that Brian find a new girlfriend. -> Link Brian (seperate section), and "During a costume party, Lois suggests that Brian should find a girlfriend."
 * "he finds out that Carolyn began to date Cleveland" -> "he finds out that Carolyn has began to date Cleveland".
 * "Feeling sorry for Brian, Stewie suggests that find Cleveland's ex-wife, Loretta, and convince her to reconcile" -> Need to expand on the sentence - why do they look for her?
 * Fix correct link to The Cleveland–Loretta Quagmire.
 * "Since both Brian and Cleveland have been cheated on by the same woman, they make amends." -> for what?

Production

 * "It was written by the show's main voice actor" -> Makes it sound like Henry is the main character of the show.
 * Rmv "and veteran writer".
 * "In addition to the regular cast, actress Kat Foster portrayed the voice of Carolyn, and actress Meredith Baxter portrayed herself" -> Reference?
 * "Recurring guest voice actors" -> Dodgy term of phrase.

CR

 * "The episode's title is a reference to the British romantic comedy film Love Actually" -> Source?
 * "Woodstock also makes a cameo appearance" -> Explain what show he is from.
 * "Cleveland's deadpan exclamation of "...and boom goes the dynamite" during sex with Carolyn is a reference to an Owen Wilson line from the film Shanghai Noon used during Ball State University student Brian Collins' appearance as television sports anchor, which became an Internet sensation." -> Too long and Reference?
 * "Cleveland and Carolyn meet at a Starbucks" -> Back this up with an overview of the episode.

Reception

 * "Family Guy" -> Italics.

- Tell me on my talk page when you have finished/if you have any questions. — M.Mario  (T/C) 15:35, 3 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Fixed everything you listed. Pedro J.  the rookie 18:31, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Passed. Well done for restoring the article! — M.Mario  (T/C) 21:05, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. Pedro J.  the rookie 21:07, 3 October 2012 (UTC)