Talk:Love Again (Dua Lipa song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:21, 6 May 2022 (UTC)

This is two months old, making a review well overdue!! --K. Peake 07:21, 6 May 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
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 * Pipe Clarence Coffee Jr. to The Monsters & Strangerz under songwriters
 * Pipe Stephen Kozmeniuk to Koz (musician)
 * WP:OVERLINK of Koz (musician) under producer(s)
 * "from her second studio album" → "from her second studio album,"
 * The production part is not sourced anywhere in the body
 * Vulture source used in "Music and lyrics"
 * The release part should be the fourth sentence of the first para instead
 * ""Love Again" is a classically-sounding" → "It is a classic-sounding" per the body sourcing this, not classical the genre
 * The sample sentence should come directly after the above one
 * "and personal growth. They see Lipa" → "and personal growth, seeing Lipa"
 * Remove release year of "My Woman" since that being solely in the body is sufficient
 * "with its strings, horn and trumpet," → "using it for the melody," to avoid too much lead detail
 * ""Love Again" was sent for → "it was sent for"
 * Remove "from Future Nostalgia" because you have already said the single is from the album earlier on in this sentence
 * "on 4 June 2021 globally." → "on 4 June globally." to avoid overusage of the year
 * "used in its production" → "used in the production"
 * "Commercially, the song reached" → "Commercially, "Love Again" reached" and the Global chart position should be the last of the three
 * "where it reached the summit." → "reaching the summit in the last of the territories." and any countries this charted in need to be sourced in the body
 * "is certified silver in the United Kingdom and platinum in" → "has been certified silver in the United Kingdom by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI) and platinum in both" with the wikilink, also mention the other respective organizations
 * Remove introduction to Lope Serrano, as that being in the body only is fine
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on London
 * I don't think "saddle" is really an appropriate term here
 * "on multiple occasions including at the" → "on multiple occasions in 2021, including at the" removing the year from any of the occasions listed because all of this sentence is 2021 performances

Writing and production
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 * Img looks good!
 * Pipe Clarence Coffee Jr. to The Monsters & Strangerz
 * Pipe Stephen Kozmeniuk to Koz (musician)
 * "who had been dishonest" → "who was dishonest"
 * "Lipa didn't recognize herself" → "Lipa failed to recognize herself"
 * "but they hadn't written anything" → "but had not written anything"
 * "to that studio" → "to the studio"
 * Second studio album introduction is redundant since that has already been provided in the lead
 * Wikilink riff
 * Pipe drum break to Break (music), rather than the overly obvious wikilink on drum
 * "positive energy into ones life" → "positive energy into one's life"
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on guitar per WP:OVERLINK
 * Wikilink song structure
 * "and the crediting of the song's writers that includes" → "and credit for its writers, including" on the img text, also pipe sample to Sampling (music)
 * "build with a lot of drums before and string part" does not read right at all; maybe something like "built up with a lot of a drums, before working on the string part" or whatever this really means better worded
 * Remove commas around Drew Jurecka
 * "which she expressed her admiration for how" → "which she admired for how"
 * Wikilink middle eight per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Add the release year of Star Wars in brackets, as it is the same for the movie or film no matter which is referenced
 * "She described it as a visual line" → "She described the line as a visual one"
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on London
 * "the ad libs last which she was nervous for thinking" → "the ad-libs last, nervously thinking" with the pipe
 * "with great acoustics where" → "with strong acoustics where" to be less repetitive
 * Sleep Sound should only be mentioned once in prose
 * Pipe mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on Los Angeles
 * Remove wikilink on middle eight since this should have been done earlier on
 * "but quickly went" → "but quickly went with the"
 * Remove pipe on mix

Music and lyrics
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 * Audio sample looks good!
 * ""Love Again" is a" → "Musically, "Love Again" is a"
 * Remove wikilink on middle eight
 * Remove wikilink on chord progression
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on violin per WP:OVERLINK
 * "stirring, and buzzing" → "stirring and buzzing" and the sample sentence should be directly after this one
 * "make up its chord progression and much of its" → "make up the chord progression and much of the"
 * "strings, horn, and" → "strings, horn and"
 * Pipe register to Vocal register
 * "a new relationship, and explains" → "a new relationship and explains"
 * "After a falling out with" → "Having fallen out with"
 * "into their lives when things aren't" → "into their life when things are not" and this should be the last sentence instead

Release and promotion
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 * "is apart on" → "is apart of"
 * Pipe percussion to Percussion instrument
 * "instrumentals, and strutting beats" → "instrumentals and strutting beats"
 * I'm not sure if squelchy is an appropriate term here; it is not a reception section, remember
 * Removed. LOVI  33  03:44, 10 May 2022 (UTC)
 * You should mention that Lipa talks about the making of the song in the episode
 * "on 4 June 2021." → "on 4 June."
 * "fifteen months following" → "after 15 months following" per MOS:NUM
 * No name for the Italy radio service?
 * There was a consensus on this a little while ago, I can't find it right now but essentially the source for Italy radio dates doesn't have a specific format so "Radio airplay" was deemed a more accurate term. LOVI  33  03:44, 10 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Add the term "stations" after the names of the radio ones in the US
 * "was officially sent to" → "was officially sent as a single to" to be specific
 * "and the 15 October 2021-released" → "and the 15 October-released" to avoid overusage of the year

Critical reception
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 * Retitle to Reception per the inclusion of best-of lists
 * This should be ordered by thematic element, i.e. reviews focused on the sample first
 * "sample, calling them "goosebump-inducing,"[56] while musicOMHs Nick Smith stated they" → "sample as "goosebump-inducing,"[56] while musicOMHs Nick Smith stated it"
 * "thought the song was reminiscent of" → "found the song to be reminiscent of"
 * Add a space after "Turn the Beat Around"
 * Wikilink Spectrum Culture
 * Article was deleted. LOVI  33  15:14, 10 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "best use of a sample with the "My Woman" sample." → "best use of a sample with "My Woman"."
 * "also named it" → "also questioned if it is"
 * "pro-love song to date."" → "pro-love song to date"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "25th best song,[62] and writer" → "25th best song and writer", moving this ranking to the end of the section instead
 * "Writing for Crack Magazine, Michael Cragg" → "For Crack Magazine, Michael Cragg"
 * Remove wikilink on ballad per MOS:LINKSTYLE
 * "dancefloor-ready bop."" → "dancefloor-ready bop"."
 * "add a "jolt of nostalgia,"" → "adds a "jolt of nostalgia","
 * ""out-of-body love experience."" → ""out-of-body love experience"."
 * "are "non-committal," and the" → "are "non-committal" and the"
 * "not make it "soar."" → "not make it "soar"."
 * The Evan Sawdey review should come first, as that is not a negative one
 * Separate rankings from the reviews by starting a new para for them
 * "your better wishes."" → "your better wishes"."

Commercial performance
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 * "on the chart." → "on the Global 200."
 * "on the chart dated" → "on the issue dated"
 * "on chart, and charted for" → "on the UK Singles Chart, lasting for"
 * The chart positions should be order geographically, so add the rest of the European ones after the UK, then North America followed by Oceania
 * Any of the countries referenced in the lead must be mentioned, even if you simply say it reached the top 10 in them
 * "at number 11 in its" → "at number 11 in the"
 * "In the United States, the song" → "In the US, the song" per MOS:US
 * Wikilink NZ Hot Singles Chart per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Mention where it was certified by the Federazione Industria Musicale Italiana (FIMI) and the date of certification
 * Mention the date of the Polish certification too

Background and release
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 * "Canada attempted to gather" → "Serrano attempted to gather" per the source mentioning that it was him, not the company as a whole
 * "found new meanings the rodeo elements" → "found new meanings of the rodeo elements"
 * Wikilink music video on the img text
 * Remove wikilink on London
 * "Serrano recalled that she enjoyed" → "Serrano recalled she enjoyed"
 * Pipe VFX to Visual effects
 * "as well as adjusting the natural shadow of the horse." → "as well as adjusting its natural shadow." to be less wordy
 * "It premiered on" → "It premiered via" to be less repetitive
 * "This version features an opening of" → "This version opens with"
 * "that is lyrics of" → "which is the lyrics of" but where is it sourced that they are reading a script at the beginning?
 * Promonews: "In the DC there's the initial dialogue following the lyrics of the song". LOVI  33  03:47, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "more shots of the rodeo clowns," → "more shots of the clowns," to be less repetitive
 * Pipe final credits to Closing credits
 * Where is it sourced that a rodeo clown, specifically, rides a horse?
 * Promonews source again. LOVI  33  03:47, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

Analysis and synopsis
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 * Img looks good!
 * None of the first sentence is sourced; I am aware of MOS:TVPLOT but things like what title cards say still require sourcing
 * I think it is a appropriate per WP:PLOTCITE. LOVI  33  04:05, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "The visual starts out with a cowboy hat floating" → "Simultaneously, a cowboy hat floats"
 * "Intercut scenes of her" → "Intercut scenes of Lipa"
 * Pipe LED to Light-emitting diode
 * The LEDs and green top are not directly sourced
 * The Wonderland reference shows a screenshot of the outfit, which I think should be appropriate considering WP:PLOTCITE. The source says miniature light bulbs so I changed it to that. LOVI  33  04:05, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * [29][105] should solely be at the end of the sentence
 * Wikilink slow motion
 * "and hot pink cowboy boots." → "and pink cowboy boots." because hot is not encyclopaedic
 * [103][29][105][106] should be put in numerical order
 * "in another room while rodeo clowns do the same and" → "in the same bowl while rodeo clowns crack them too and" per the source
 * "while also making omelettes." → "as well as making omelettes."
 * "camo green cargo pants," → "camouflage green cargo pants,"
 * [109] is not the correct source for invisible horse appearances
 * Source: "as cowboys ride invisible animals" but added another source to back up that it is for horses. LOVI  33  04:05, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "an anonymous person, with both of them wearing" → "an anonymous person; they both wear" to avoid overusage of with
 * "onto her partners jacket." → "onto her partner's jacket."

Reception
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 * "was a metaphor for" → "may be a metaphor for"
 * "while also comparing it to the video for" → "while also comparing it to the clip for"
 * Remove wikilink on Madonna
 * "Devon Ivie it a" → "Devon Ivie labeled the music video a"
 * "that her "falling in" → "that "has us falling in" per the source
 * "the video while calling" → "the video, while calling"
 * "the choreography "TikTok" → "the choreography "a TikTok" with the wikilink
 * "were more "surreal" while also stating that the clown makeup was" → "are more "surreal", while also stating that the clown makeup is"
 * "on the mechanical bull." → "on the bull." to be less repetitive, but does this review really praise her performance or merely mention it?
 * Removed. LOVI  33  04:12, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "and praising its surreality." → "and praising the surreality."
 * "the video give the song" → "the video gives the song"
 * "rodeo fantasy" while commending" → "rodeo fantasy", while commending"

Live performances
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 * "She performed "Love Again" for" → "Lipa performed "Love Again" for" but the song being performed is not sourced
 * "On 29 May 2020, she" → "On 29 May, she" but the song is not sourced as being part of the charity concert
 * Removed both of these. I'm pretty sure there were proper links attached to these sources before but they seem to have been removed and I cannot find a back up. Also, not the most reliable sources. LOVI  33  04:17, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Pipe livestream to Livestreaming
 * Lipa's special quote is not sourced
 * She says it in the video attached to the source. LOVI  33  04:17, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "of the song, and the concert" → "of the song and the concert"
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on Washington D.C. per WP:OVERLINK
 * "a guitarist, and a" → "a guitarist and a" and the source does not state the exact number of backup singers is four
 * Wikilink drum machine
 * "she performed the track" → "the singer performed a stripped-down acoustic version of the track" with the pipe
 * Pipe to Time 100 should only be on 2021 Time 100
 * "41st BRIT Awards as part of her set list of a Future Nostalgia Medley" → "41st Brit Awards as part of her set list of a Future Nostalgia Medley"
 * "on 17 September 2021." → "on 17 September." to avoid overusage of the year
 * Unicef → UNICEF with the wikilink
 * The source does not mention that the song was performed for the above concert
 * Removed. LOVI  33  04:17, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

Track listings
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 * Add the appropriate sources for these listings

Personnel
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 * Pipe Koz to Koz (musician)
 * Pipe Clarence Coffee Jr. to The Monsters & the Strangerz

Weekly charts

 * Good

Year-end charts

 * The Croatia year-end position is not mentioned by the source
 * There is a link in the source to a PDF showing the full rankings. LOVI  33  04:22, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

Certifications

 * Good

Release history

 * The 4 June 2021 release is only sourced for streaming by the ref
 * Add backup. LOVI  33  04:29, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Again, are you sure there is no name known for the Italy radio station?
 * Yes per above. LOVI  33  04:29, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; this is not one of your strongest but congrats on making it so big! --K. Peake 09:11, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review . Apologies for taking so long with the comments, I've been very busy this week. I hope everything looks okay now. LOVI  33  18:56, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Nice response, this came less than a week after the review was completed so I wasn't sweating it! However, when I said the production part is not written out in the body I meant mentioning that Koz was the sole producer, also if the Croatia year-end position is sourced from the PDF then why not cite that instead? --K. Peake 07:27, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
 * I have made these changes. LOVI  33  17:40, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, good job on fixing the problems! --K. Peake 09:26, 13 May 2022 (UTC)