Talk:Love Sex Magic/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 13:46, 5 March 2011 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: none found.

Linkrot: none found. Jezhotwells (talk) 13:48, 5 March 2011 (UTC)

Checking against GA criteria

 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * The article is not well written:
 * the lead single in international countries "international countries"? What other kind are there?
 * The song sees a complete departure in Ciara's previous style of music "departure in"
 * Thus it embraces more of a dance-pop sound, "Thus" is unnecessary here
 * as well as Ciara performing choreography with dancers "performing choreography"?
 * For its routines it was nominated for ?
 * Ciara praised her time with Timberlake "praised her time".
 * She also complimented how passionate Timberlake was about his work, as well as his humbleness and attitude. "complimented"?
 * This is badly written, should never have been nominated in this state. Please get it copy-edited by someone with a command of good plain English. The WP:Guild of copyeditors may be able to help.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * References appear to be reliable, article is adequately referenced
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Good coverage, but is there nothing about the actual recording sessions? The credits section does not list any musicians?
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * This article is not well written and needs copy-editing. There are also points about coverage above. On hold for seven days. Jezhotwells (talk) 14:29, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
 * The copy edit has taken place. Candy  o32  00:35, 7 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Really? The specific problems that I noted above remain. I suggest that you find someone who can actually read and write good plain English. The WP:Guild of copyeditors may be able to help. Jezhotwells (talk) 06:09, 7 March 2011 (UTC)
 * I took your first suggestion and went to the Guild and posted my request, and someone from there was the one who did it. Just so you know, I am an intelligent native English speaker. Candy  o32  22:36, 7 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, I see that some work has been done, but as I say many of the points i mentioned have not been addressed, so maybe you need to find someone else. I have noted before that not all members of the Guild of copyeditors are actually very good at copy-editing, and sadly this seems to be a nother instance of that.
 * Another edit has taken place another person. Candy  o32  23:03, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
 * OK, I think that the prose is now improved sufficiently. I made further copy-edits.  better luck with finding a copy-editor next time. Listing as a Good Article. Jezhotwells (talk) 23:42, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, I see that some work has been done, but as I say many of the points i mentioned have not been addressed, so maybe you need to find someone else. I have noted before that not all members of the Guild of copyeditors are actually very good at copy-editing, and sadly this seems to be a nother instance of that.
 * Another edit has taken place another person. Candy  o32  23:03, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
 * OK, I think that the prose is now improved sufficiently. I made further copy-edits.  better luck with finding a copy-editor next time. Listing as a Good Article. Jezhotwells (talk) 23:42, 11 March 2011 (UTC)