Talk:Love in Motion (Anika Moa album)/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: -- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   23:16, 29 November 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * The album's underlying theme is one of love, and in writing the album, Moa drew the most inspiration from her civil partner, Azaria Universe. -> could read better.
 * Better?


 * I know your from New Zealand, but the dates are backwards.
 * MOS:DATE - either style is acceptable. Since this is about a NZ-origin album, I have used NZ English


 * Love in Motion saw Moa -> can albums see?
 * Lol, done


 * Critical reviews for the album have been mostly positive, and it debuted and peaked on the New Zealand Albums Chart at number four -> doesn't flow. Consider splitting
 * Done


 * The lead single from Love in Motion was "Running Through the Fire (Storm)", -> "RTFS" served as the album's lead single, which peaked '''
 * Done

Background

 * shouldn't it be Background and inspiration? You speak about the song's lyrical inspiration, not so much the recording process
 * Inspiration is part of an album's background


 * the album.[2][3] The album -> try to mix it up a bit
 * Done


 * "In the Air" is about Moa's fear of flying. -> sentencing is a bit awkward. Could be fixed up a bit. Many sentences don't flow and are so short, it reads choppy
 * Hmm, take a look now?


 * and the album was recorded in two more weeks -> with the entire recording process being completed in one month; or something like that
 * That would kind of blur what the source is saying.


 * and the album was produced by Moa and Andre Upston -> doesn't flow with the beginning of the sentence
 * Done

Music and lyrics

 * should be music and composition, as this section doesn't speak much of the lyrics, as the previous section does
 * Renamed as 'Composition'


 * Love in Motion saw -> doesn't make sense
 * Done


 * pop rock environment -> environment
 * Eh?


 * The sound of -> the sound? or the song?
 * Rewrote sentence


 * ". -> you have allot these issues
 * I don't understand. Do you mean I have too many quotes?


 * Katarina Filipe praised Moa's live performing nature, noting that "the radio and CD versions were nothing compared to her on-stage performance" -> is this a good thing?
 * Yes, the recorded versions were nothing (ie bad) compared to her live performances (ie really good)

Singles

 * It has not appeared on any singles chart, however. -> it didn't; also try combining it with another sentence.

Charts

 * You should create a peaking chart as well as certifications wherever applicable.
 * Why? It has only appeared on one chart.