Talk:Loved (video game)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tezero (talk · contribs) 01:40, 14 December 2014 (UTC)

Fix/address these and you've got a GA. Tezero (talk) 01:40, 14 December 2014 (UTC) Thanks for taking this! How's it look now? 23W 02:40, 14 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Pics are fine; recommend expanding FURs if aiming for FAC
 * Citation 6 (Kris Ligman) needs publisher/work
 * Fixed. 23W
 * A few others have works but need publishers if available (or just switch everything to publisher-only/work-only/everything-as-publisher)
 * I believe works without a publisher would be considered self-published, so they don't need publishers. 23W
 * Are links to publishers/works, if available, required? Admonish me if not, but I think they'd at least help
 * I perfer not to have them, as the section just becomes a sea of links. 23W
 * "transforming from the exploration genre to a mining- and building-based adventure game" - what's the difference between exploration and adventure? Both are compatible with platforming anyway, e.g. Metroidvanias, some open-world games with platforming elements like The Simpsons Hit & Run. Any more information on these initial concepts available?
 * I guess because exploration is considered more nonlinear than adventure? I dunno, I took that near verbatim from the citation. 23W
 * "with some reviewers finding the game to be thought provoking, while others have criticised it for having poor controls." - awkward construction (gerund in first clause, past-tense verb in second); also, "thought-provoking" should be hyphenated
 * Recast slightly: . 23W 02:40, 14 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Are Kill Screen and Dude reliable sources? Not saying they're not - I know nothing about them - but why should one think they are?
 * Kill Screen seems to have garnered some praise from mainstream sources over the years; I asked WT:VG/RS and Sergecross73 said it was alright by the "music Wikipedia community". With Dude, I just wanted a foreign source. Smells of zine, but it's gathered some recognition in Italy. 23W
 * "named it one of their top-11 favourite independent games" - was this part of a "top-11 games" (that's an odd accolade) ranking, or just part of a regular critical review? Also, top-11 isn't hyphenated
 * The former; I don't know why I named 11 when there's 16 listed in the source—fixed. 23W
 * "which he jokingly figured to "have five seconds" of attention span" - a little awkward; rephrasing not necessary for GA, but at least does this need to be quoted?
 * Trimmed. 23W
 * "sometimes to achieve goals but often to suggest actions that will kill the player character" - can you give a few examples?
 * Gave one example that was in the source: . 23W
 * "players are sometimes, but not always, congratulated when following these instructions" - what if they aren't? Are they insulted?
 * Yep; expanded this. 23W
 * Looks fine. Surprised you're around, but hey, now you've got something off your list. Tezero (talk) 04:18, 14 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Sweet! 23W 06:42, 14 December 2014 (UTC)