Talk:Low Fell/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 10:10, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

I'll be taking the review.

Opening comments

 * Too much quoting going on. Most notable in "Economy" and "Education" but overly present throughout. Keep WP:Close paraphrasing in mind and rewrite the sections to remove the quotations. Generally if you use so many, the surrounding words end up very similar and this is problematic.
 * I have re-written the two stated sections and have made other changes throughout the article to address this Meetthefeebles (talk) 15:22, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Much better.


 * Hyphens are used instead of dashes in many places. Consult WP:DASH for more information.
 * I have used the endash instead Meetthefeebles (talk) 15:22, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * You've still got several in the second paragraph of "venues" in numerical ranges. Also "learned his trade" is non encyclopedic; that paragraph could do with a look at. There's also a full stop missing at the end of the first paragraph. [Edit: indeed, many of the hyphen issues remain. Use a spaced en-dash (" ndash; ") for a dash, and an unspaced one in ranges ("1885–87"). There are some wrong in the references also.]


 * The bus route colours fail Manual of Style/Accessibility, tone them down to pastel shades if you feel the colour is important.
 * The colours used are, rather bizarrely, pretty much the exact colours that the buses have been painted by the wisdom of Go-North East. That is the reason for the use. Whilst I agree that they are rather garish, there is I think therefore a good reason for their use. Rather than change the colours, which I think might be a little misleading, I'd rather either leave them be or simply removed them Meetthefeebles (talk) 15:22, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I've changed the design of the table to accomodate the colours and guidelines.


 * Make reference #73 more like a proper reference, rather than an image caption which is how it looks at the moment to ensure verifiability.
 * Fixed Meetthefeebles (talk) 15:22, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I don't believe this is fixed. Cite the webpage as a webpage, for example with cite web.


 * Several grammatical mistakes, e.g. "on the 17 June 1826" missing a full stop; "now instead residential suburb" ;"it's blue plaque". Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:10, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I think these have been corrected (though I may have missed the odd one) Meetthefeebles (talk) 15:22, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

Okay, I'm not long in from work and I have spotted a few of these myself after I responded to the original comments. Using wiki-shortcuts like citeweb is something I am notoriously bad at, so my apologies. The bus table looks much better (and I would have had no idea how to actually do this...) :) Meetthefeebles (talk) 16:33, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

I have gone over the article again in detail and believe that all of the outstanding issues have been addressed Meetthefeebles (talk) 17:36, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, the article is in good shape. The dashes still aren't correct in many of the references: they should be spaced n-dashes (spaced on both sides). However, this isn't enough to suggest that the article fails any of the criteria, so I'm passing the article. Well done! Consider reviewing an article against the criteria. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 18:48, 16 June 2012 (UTC)