Talk:Low Memorial Library/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:58, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking a look at this! —  Ghost River  16:58, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * I believe "Low" in "also nicknamed Low" should be boldface, per MOS:BOLDSYN
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Strike "developed as the centerpiece of the university's Morningside Heights campus" in the second paragraph, as this is explained far better in the third
 * , though I have added a better description of where it is. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Greek cross should be linked up here in addition to its body link
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Should "exterior" and "interior" be capitalized in the Designated NYCL parameter?
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Site

 * A lot of repetition of Morningside Heights; while there are additional campuses (usually for graduate schools), I think it's generally understood that this is the "main" campus
 * ✅ I've trimmed the mention of the name "Morningside Heights". It's mostly used because there's a campus in neighboring Manhattanville. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

The Steps

 * No comma needed after "The flight itself has an intermediate landing"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Although not strictly falling under MOS:CAPCONTEXT, at no point are "protests" mentioned in the prose about the Steps, but they are in the associated caption (Edit: protests are mentioned as taking place in the library, but not specifically on the steps)
 * ✅ I replaced "protests" with "other events", which is a catch-all that does cover what's in the prose. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Form

 * The "however" sets up a comparison not fully realized. Try "Unlike these other libraries"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Is there a reason the inch conversions go to millimeters instead of centimeters?
 * This is a default function of convert when no "unit to convert to" has been specified. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Facade

 * Good

Features

 * Should be commas rather than semicolons for the sentence beginning "The first floor shared design influences"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Measuring 30 by 33 feet (9.1 by 10.1 m). Sentence fragment.
 * Oops, I meant to combine this with the last sentence. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "more simple" "simpler"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "the whole north wing" "the entire north wing"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Development

 * "Later the same month" "Later that month"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "which Ware agreed with" "to which Ware agreed"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Switch the two clauses of the sentence beginning "Likely in part because of the uncertainties"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Library use

 * "where Seth Low stepped down as president" "during which Seth Low announced his resignation"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The information in the caption of the photo c. 1897 needs a citation
 * I definitely did not add that. While the info is almost definitely cited somewhere, it's not really relevant here. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "and 310,000 bound volumes" "as well as 310,000 bound volumes"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Comma after "who had replaced Seth Low as university president"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

Administrative offices

 * Good

Critical reception

 * "intended to not only symbolize" "intended not only to symbolize"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "but also serve" "but also to serve"
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Do we know which "Rumpf" this might refer to?
 * I have no idea who this may be. The original text only mentions an "M. Rumpf", who either doesn't have an article or isn't listed on the Rumpf page. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Awkward extra space in the Schuyler quote
 * ✅ Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The part about Eisenhower seems tangential – source says that the bicentennial was really the reason behind the stamp, and Eisenhower was just mentioned because he might be speaking
 * Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * All photos are properly licensed and are relevant to the article
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks good at 20.0%

Mostly minor things, as usual. Let me know if there are any questions! —  Ghost River  17:32, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I've addressed all these issues now. Epicgenius (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good now, passing! —  Ghost River  18:52, 5 October 2021 (UTC)