Talk:Lowthian Bell/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: James086 (talk · contribs) 11:59, 6 February 2013 (UTC)

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 * The centered quote in the lead section is weird, I think it should be a normal in-line quotation. The MOS says it should be 40 or more words for a blockquote and that one breaks up the text too early on. Blockquote

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 * I understand by reading further in the article that the Forth Bridge is the company, but it's not clear in the lead, I think just the addition of the word "company" would clarify it for first-time readers.

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 * Again the length of the centered quote is too short regarding the wooden rails in the Industry section.

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 * This sentence is hard to read, I think it should be restructured: "In 1901, after a long period of difficulty for heavy industry including mining, steel and shipbuilding, with, he feared, worse to come as manufacturing grew in Germany, America and Japan, he made a decisive move, at age 85, to guard the family's wealth."
 * Perhaps "In 1901, at age 85, after a long period of difficulty for heavy industry and with fears of worse to come as manufacturing grew in Germany, America and Japan, he made a decisive move to guard the family's wealth."

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 * In "Family life" it's not clear who Georgina Howell is. "According to his granddaughter's biographer Georgina Howell..." would fix this

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 * Should William Morris have an apostrophe to imply possession of the "Double Bough" wallpaper?

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 * I also made two minor changes diff

The article looks really good, it's certainly an interesting read. On hold until these have been looked at. James086 Talk 11:59, 6 February 2013 (UTC) Thank you. All comments to date --- done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:55, 6 February 2013 (UTC)


 * Well that was fast! I should encourage you to review another article but it would be almost hypocritical of me when you have reviewed 20 times as many articles as myself! Excellent work. James086 Talk  13:03, 6 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Thankyou for the review, it was quick of you too. Of course I'll review another article, time I did. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:14, 6 February 2013 (UTC)