Talk:Lozman v. City of Riviera Beach (2018)/GA1

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Reviewer: MaxnaCarta (talk · contribs) 09:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

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Hi, nice to meet you. I actually was reading this case out of pure interest and observed it was a GA nominee. I am a practising lawyer in Australia and have reviewed one law related GA nom and have one GA myself. Just introducing myself as we have not previously communicated directly. Hopefully you feel I can do a good job reviewing your GA nom. I am a relaxed reviewer, I personally feel. I apply a rather broad interpretation to the GA criteria. I do not feel a GA article needs to be perfect but rather just...good! Having read your article, this is one that I think will easily pass. Just a few initial issues to discuss before I commence drafting the review template.

Please see issues. Let me know in the comment part if you believe this is a fair/accurate pickup. If so, please fix and let me know when done. If not, please tell me why it is not a good pickup and let's chat! Thanks and look forward to working with you. MaxnaCarta (talk) 09:24, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi, MaxnaCarta! Think we've interacted in passing before, but never at length, so nice to formally meet you, and thanks for taking this on. Would be cool to get my first GA the same month as my ten-year anniversary here. (By the way, if you didn't know, adding a ping to an already-posted message doesn't ping someone.)This is a kind of amusing situation for me, reading through your comments, as IRL I'm currently freelance copy-editing a book, so now I get a little taste of being on the other side of that equation.  All of your comments so far seem reasonable, and I've replied to a few of the easy ones. I likewise look forward to working with you.  --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 10:08, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi @Tamzin, thank you! I will not deny the biggest learning curve here has been learning to use code. I am somewhat successful but not really. I think we are probably sameish age, but my skills feel quite old school compared to some here. Please see resolved comments. I am now drafting the review. If any issues, I'll let you know, but I believe this will be passed by the end of today unless I come across something unexpected. MaxnaCarta (talk) 03:19, 11 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Oh and @Tamzin? I know that there have been previous cases, but I do not think we need to stipulate the year in the page title. Most cases that reach the supreme/highest court of the land in any country have had prior litigation history, and it is not common practice to include the year in the page title. Not a barrier to GA passing - but I think we should remove the year. MaxnaCarta (talk) 03:27, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

Initial issues

 * Issue: First line of text, why is there an ____? Is this some part of U.S. referencing? Or does it need to be removed?
 * Comment: That's standard for a Supreme Court opinion that is yet to be published in the U.S. Reports. SCOTUS commits to a volume at time of decision, but not to a page number. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 10:03, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed? I suspected there was a reason for this.


 * Issue: "who had been arrested while criticizing local politicians during the public comments section of a City Council meeting" - could City Council be linked?
 * Comment: I like the idea, but I'm not sure where to point to. City council is a very broad article, and Local government in the United States has no content on Florida. Riviera Beach City Council and Government of Riviera Beach are redlinks and there's no "Government" section at Riviera Beach. Maybe Council–manager government? That's the specific kind of system used in Riviera Beach, although the article still has nothing about that system in Florida in particular. Will think on this, or welcome your ideas. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 10:03, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Created, redirected Riviera Beach City Council to that, and linked to it. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 12:27, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed?


 * Issue: "In the 1977 case of Mt. Healthy City School District Board of Education v. Doyle, the Supreme Court established a standard of but-for causation for claims of official retaliation against speech": this needs or would be better with a secondary reference. The next sentence is properly referenced in the same way this one could be.
 * Comment: The Koerner cite is meant to apply to both preceding sentences, with the two primaries in there for convenience and to briefly describe the holdings, Bluebook-style. If you think it would be better to duplicate the Koerner cite at the end of the first sentence too, I'm fine with that; six of one, half a dozen of the other, to me. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 10:03, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed? No worries. May come up again at Featured, but not a barrier to passing GA.


 * Issue: "Lozman often spoke during the public comments portion of City Council meetings". What did he say and what was discussed Citation?
 * Comment: This good? --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 13:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed? Great!


 * Issue: "At a meeting in November 2006, he began his remarks by noting the arrests of two officials of Palm Beach County, which Riviera Beach is a part of." Needs citation.
 * Comment:  --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 13:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed?


 * Issue: "Lozman then sued Riviera Beach pro se under 42 U.S.C. § 1983" - interesting, we merely refer to this as self-representation here in oz. Never heard the term pro se before. No objection to this staying, but too technical for the average reader? I know it's correct terminology, but I would not say "in her ratio decidendi, Ginsberg was a boss". While true, could we not say "in her reasons for her decision"? I am not a fan of latin. You may disagree however, not a barrier to passing. Same with "(assumed arguendo to exist)"
 * Comment: Yeah, arguendo is too technical. Looking through Google News, pro se definitely sees a fair amount of usage in non-technical publications, but it appears to be the minority approach. I'll reword. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 10:03, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * -- Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 12:27, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed?


 * Issue: Please find a secondary citation for "Justice Anthony M. Kennedy wrote for an eight-member majority"
 * Comment: Isn't that supported by the existing citation?  --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 13:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed?


 * Issue: Please capitalise Court. When referring to the Supreme Court of the United States even in part, the C must be capitalised. See San Francisco Bar Association practice note here.
 * Comment: This seems inconsistent with MOS:INSTITUTIONS. I realize I'm capitalizing "City Council", but I think generally legislative chambers' names are treated as proper nouns, e.g. "the House" or "the Senate". But I would think "the Court" would be generic and thus it should be lowercased. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 13:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed? - Given this is an encyclopaedia and not a court document, our guidelines take priority.


 * Issue: The following is a long sentence. Justice Clarence Thomas, in a solo dissent, wrote that plaintiffs should categorically have to "plead and prove a lack of probable cause as an element of a First Amendment retaliatory-arrest claim" and criticized the majority for "leaving in place the decades-long disagreement among the federal courts". I would write: Justice Clarence Thomas, in a solo dissent, wrote that plaintiffs should categorically have to "plead and prove a lack of probable cause as an element of a First Amendment retaliatory-arrest claim". Thomas criticized the majority for "leaving in place the decades-long disagreement among the federal courts".
 * Comment:, although I used "he" rather than "Thomas" in the second sentence. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 13:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed? Thanks! I agree with your approach, consistency is required.


 * Issue: "Heidi Kitrosser of SCOTUSblog compared its limited scope to the Onion headline "Supreme Court Issues Landmark 'It Depends' Ruling" - you cite the onion article, but where is the Kitrosser citation?
 * Comment: In the same ref, With facts like these, supra; that appeared to be the correct way, in Bluebook, to indicate that I'm reusing a previously-cited source, but with a "citing..." not in the original. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 13:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed? Fair explanation.


 * Issue: "First Amendment Foundation filed a brief amicus curiae" ajdfdaksjfh! Why more latin? SMirC-chuckle.svg
 * Comment: This one really is pretty common in the U.S., even in non-technical publications. I happen to have recently written an article mostly about an amicus brief (which, purely coincidentally actually, turned out to have a tie-in back to this one!), and looking at the general-audience-oriented cites in that, WaPo says "amicus brief" on first reference and defines it several paragraphs later, NPR say "amicus brief" and never defines it, NYT says "friend-of-the-court", and AP just says "brief". So 2 out of 4, and the Times does say "amicus" fairly often, just apparently not in that article. So I think this bit of Latin is better kept. --  Tamzin  [ cetacean needed ] (she&#124;they&#124;xe) 13:09, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Addressed? - Look, I personally would avoid it. Perhaps at FA level, it may be something to consider discussing further. However for the purposes of GA, this is no barrier and I consider both our positions to be adequate. Given this "your" (I know it does not belong to anyone, but you did most of the work is what i mean) article instead of my own submission, I see no reason my view should take precedence and so there is no reason it should change for a GA review.