Talk:Luís Gama

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Mariaa45. Peer reviewers: Aaldridge97, A blinka.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 00:20, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Proposed Ideas
I plan to add more information on the several careers Gama had throughout his life to improve his biography. For example, he has worked as an officer, a clerk, an editor and a lawyer. Also to improve his biography, I will provide detail about his personal life, as he did marry and have a child. I also plan on adding more details about his political views and actions in Brazil. Lastly, I plan to expand more on his literary works and their themes.

Comments
I think this is a good way to start your revision. I like the biographical focus that you're taking.

Jgriffith19 (talk) 18:24, 1 March 2018 (UTC)

Comments on Proposed Edits
Hello! I think you have great ideas for improving this page and your preliminary bibliography looks promising. If I am understanding your proposal correctly, you plan on adding sections on careers, personal life, literary contributions, and political views. These are ambitious edits! It looks like you have supporting information for each proposed additional section, but make sure you are drawing information for each section from multiple sources rather than one or two per section. Ultimately your edits appear to be well thought out at this stage and are great future contributions to Wikipedia. Good Luck! A blinka (talk) 14:36, 28 February 2018 (UTC)

Full Draft
Great job on this draft. I added a couple of wikilinks and fixed the ones that didn't have other pages to go to. If the information is available, see if you can develop the shorter sections a bit more (possibly political career and the intro). Overall this looks good and your tone seems consistent and encyclopedic throughout. A blinka (talk) 00:37, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Comments
I like the sound of your approach, it sounds well balanced. I also think the scope of the project is feasible, due to the fact that you don't have necessarily worry about using neutral language as much since you're covering an actual person. Good luck with your research! Aaldridge97 (talk) 00:08, 2 March 2018 (UTC) Andrew

New comments

I think your structure is good and you've added a lot a good detail. I think you could put more in the intro though, compared to the rest of what you have it looks pretty scarce. Good looking draft! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aaldridge97 (talk • contribs) 21:08, 1 April 2018 (UTC)

Response on Comments
Thanks for the comments all! I will make sure to find more sources to back up what I say and try to focus on each aspect of his life equally. Mariaa45 (talk) 18:35, 4 March 2018 (UTC)