Talk:Lucid (Aṣa album)

Questions for the GOCE copyedit request

 * Lucid utilizes piano-led ballads, strings and soft brass to tell a tale of the brokenhearted. Emphasis in original. Does the album tell one continuous story or does each track have its own?
 * The lyrics explore topics such as love, heartbreak, self-discovery, empowerment, joy, pain and identity. I'm not sure I understand the reason for wikilinking these themes.
 * On France 24, she recalled spending time away from the spotlight in an attempt to "live normal". Slightly edited. "Spotlight" is more of a colloquialism. Perhaps we can use something more neutral and formal? It'd be helpful if it were more narrowed down: something like "social media" or "publicity events".
 * She also stated to have written the album like a diary and poured all of her joy, heartbreak, laughter and longing on it. This might be better off as a direct quote or re-written; it does not fit the Wikipedia's tone as it is.
 * Prior to unveiling plans for the release of Lucid [...] Is it plans about the album or the album itself? I don't understand the importance of the plans to promote something rather than the thing itself.
 * Lucid utilizes piano-led ballads, strings and soft brass to tell a tale of the brokenhearted. Emphasis in original. Same question as the first one.
 * In "The Beginning", Aṣa implores her love interest to restart with her. As in start the relationship again, or just reconcile as friends?
 * "Makes No Sense" provides a dose of self-awareness and portrays Aṣa as someone who has been hurt, neglected and rejected by her love interest. This sounds too casual. Going to come back to this later to reword it.
 * "365" documents the end of a five-year emotionally-draining relationship; the song features violin and guitar strings. Why are "strings" mentioned here? Can we refer to them as just "violins" and "guitars"?
 * "9 Lives" is a message to Aṣa's former lover on the strength that she endured, after having been through emotional turmoil. Awkward wording. Will come back to this later.
 * The accompanying music video was directed by Sesan and released two months later; it is entirely a combination of subplots. Subplots need a plot to be compared to in order to exist. Are they connected? If not I suggest using the word "vignettes".
 * Music critic Dami Ajayi criticized Aṣa for toying familiar lines, while failing to take new in-roads. I'm not sure what you mean by this; could you please clarify?

Looking forward to your responses. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 )  20:16, 13 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for performing copyedits to the page. While I appreciate your efforts, I must point out that your comments look more like a review than a copyedit. This is my first time seeing a copyedit request transform into a full-length review. Having said that, I am going to address some of your concerns.  Versace1608   Wanna Talk? 01:38, 14 June 2020 (UTC)
 * , as I haven't seen this being updated in a while, I'll consider the copyedit request complete. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 )  03:58, 17 June 2020 (UTC)