Talk:Ludi Apollinares

The article includes a ton of useful information, but should probably be broken into sections... a "History" section as well as a "The Games" section would make reading and comprehension of the article much easier. You also could link a lot of words used to other wikipedia articles, including "Cannae," "Hannibal," and "Diana." The more you link, the easier it is to cross reference the games with other important Roman figures as well as place the games in a historical context. You have already mentioned you are fixing up the source section, but to easily do this, just go onto another Roman history page and look at how they have put multiple footnotes in a single source in their edit sections...if you copy and paste and change the numbers accordingly, you'll massively condense your references section. Other than this critiques, a ton of information and sources that just need a little tightening to complete a very thorough article. -Steven Berger

This was a good article in that it included all aspects one would like to know about these games: the reason they started, the god(s)/people they honored, the associated components and festivities, and how they changed over time. There are two formatting tips that may make the article easier to follow. First, can you make more links to other wikipedia articles? Secondly, by creating a name for each of your sources, wikipedia will be able to recognize each source and repeat their numbering in the text. This will also avoid repeats in the reference section. As for the meat of the article itself, I liked how you explained that the games started in response to a prophecy but shifted to honoring Apollo in result of the plague. However, I feel like that this section would be better suited at the end of the article, after you talk about how the games were initiated. Secondly, was the vow to hold the games only once part of the prophecy, or was it the decision of the ruler at that time? And finally, it would be great if you could explain / clarify how the games shifted from honoring Diana and Latona in the prophecy to honoring Apollo after the plague. Did any of the original aspects of the games carry over, or did the new games take on an entire new form? Altogether, this was a great article with a lot of good research. - 'Ryan Nelson'' '''

The article has a lot of details about the games, espically in regards to the root of the the games. It was also really good to point out the contrasting fact about who had made the games offical to be celebrated each year. The article could be better with more internal linkes.. such as one for praetor, Sibylline Books, etc since a casual reader would porbalby not know about what the job of a praetor was or what the Sibylline books are. People like Thyestes, Hannibal, would also benifit from being linked, so easier to understand the contxt of why they are being mentioned. Another suggestion, maybe move the part about what the games consists of earlier in the article, or use labels. One of the first things that I want to find out about any festival or game is what it consists of, so it should be higher up in the article. And if there's any more information about these games.. what plays were performed during the games that we still have? what type of games? is there any ancient documents describing one particular game? It would be intersting to see what a first hand account of a lundi apollnares was like. Lastly, I was a little confused about the last sentence about the ludi apollinares being shorter than other games... mostly becasue i didn't know what the ludi Romani or ludi plebeii, were. so a little more clarification would be better. Overall, the article's good just need to include some more internal links.. (they're pretty easy to add), and some elaboration. -Jessica Cheng