Talk:Ludington Public Library/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 12:57, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

Hello. I will be reviewing this article. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 12:57, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * The lead is too short as of now. It should be expanded into one or two paragraphs of three or four lines per MOS:LEADLENGTH.

Early history

 * "Articles of association were filed April 12, 1872. It was brought up then at an official city meeting on the evening of April 24, 1872 at this same location at the Pere Marquette Lumber Company store." — They would work better if merged, with some tweaks. → "Articles of association were filed on April 12, 1872, and it was brought up at an official city meeting on the evening of April 24, 1872 at the same location."


 * "The library association then occupied a small building that stood just south of the Pere Marquette Lumber Company's "Big Store" to be used freely by anyone." — Is "Pere Marquette Lumber Company's "Big Store"" the same store mentioned previously in the section? If so, "Big Store" should be mentioned when the store is first mentioned.


 * "Soon thereafter various plans were considered for a new location." — Is there a reason why they wanted to change the location so soon? If that information is available, it could be included.


 * "D. L. Filer, who had been the president so far" — "president of the library" or "president of the association"?


 * "In this proposal all the lumber necessary for its construction would be provided." — Provided by?


 * "Annual officers of 1872" and "Annual officers of 1874" — This part could should come after the second paragraph, and not the third paragraph because the article starts to talk about later events from the third paragraph.


 * "The library association subsequently moved to the second floor of the Gebhart Building at the southeast corner of Ludington Avenue and Harrison Street." — Mention the year they moved in.


 * "On June 11, 1881, there was a major city fire and the building burned to the ground, destroying all the library contents." → "On June 11, 1881, the building and all library contents were destroyed in a major city fire."


 * "however this was inadequate." — It is little subjective. Perhaps "however their collection had fewer books." would work better.

Mid history

 * "They first made contact with Andrew Carnegie around 1903 concerning obtaining funds for the construction of a new library." → "They first contacted Andrew Carnegie around 1903 to obtain funds for the construction of a new library."


 * "The city mayor of the time, Warren A. Cartier" → "Mayor Warren A. Cartier".


 * "building was declared as the library that will last a thousand years." — "the library that will last a thousand years" should be written in quotation marks if that is the exact terminology used. If not, I would suggest using the original text in quotations.


 * "The current Ludington Public Library was constructed where the "old Appeal building" once stood." — Mention the year.


 * "His was the lowest general contractor bid of $11,380.33 of the 6 bids received by the city of Ludington." → "His bid of $11,380.33 was the lowest general contractor bid of the six bids received by the city."


 * "The local Ludington newspaper then reported the minutes of the city council showing that the plans for the new library and its construction had been approved." — It isn't very clear what "the minutes" means here and the sentence could be tweaked.


 * "cquote" — Mention the date and newspaper's name in the template, like in William_B._Jordan.


 * "40 million dollars" → "$40 million" — Also, is this per the currency value of the time? If so, conversion to "$ZZZ million in YYYY" should be written in brackets.


 * "On March 1, 1906 the library opened. On its opening in March 1906 the library had assembled a collection of 3,800 books." → "On March 1, 1906 the library opened with a collection of 3,800 books."

Later history

 * "There has been since this time Friends of the Library, a group assisting the activities of the library." → "Since then a group called Friends of the Library has assisted the activities of the library."


 * "The Zonta Room, named for the local branch of Zonta International, includes extensive genealogical and historical research materials." — Needs citation.


 * "Currently the Ludington Public Library has an expansion campaign called Just Imagine" — Use "As of YYYY" instead of "currently" and unbold "Just Imagine", which should only be in italics per MOS:NOBOLD.


 * "the Vision Campaign." — A brief note explaining what it is should be added.


 * "The Ludington library celebrated its centennial in March 2006." — Should add "by organizing ...." if they had an event.

Flights of learning sculpture

 * "John and Anita Wilson" — Mention their profession or their relation to the library.


 * "The sculpture came just after the opening" — Mention the date.


 * "The metal book open at the base of the statue says it all. It explains that parents and members of the community shoulder the responsibility to better the world which can be done in a child's learning." → "The metal book open at the base of the statue is meant to imply that parents and members of the community shoulder the responsibility to better the world through a child's learning."

Double the Fun sculpture

 * "Proctor" — Mention his full name.

Final

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * The article is thoroughly researched and detailed. It reads well and meets the criteria. Thank you for another fine article related to Ludington! — The Most Comfortable Chair 07:41, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * The article is thoroughly researched and detailed. It reads well and meets the criteria. Thank you for another fine article related to Ludington! — The Most Comfortable Chair 07:41, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The article is thoroughly researched and detailed. It reads well and meets the criteria. Thank you for another fine article related to Ludington! — The Most Comfortable Chair 07:41, 19 October 2020 (UTC)