Talk:Luggala/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:33, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments That is all, it's on hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 15:14, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Other alternative names (in bold) should have redirects created to them e.g. Fancy Mountain. ✅
 * I generally expect a reference-free lead as everything there should be noted and expanded upon in the main body and referenced there. ✅ – have also split out a new "Geography" sub-section (which I should have done).
 * The lead is in general a little short for the length of the overall article. ✅ – have expanded it a bit more.
 * "230th–highest peak" hyphen, not en-dash. ✅
 * "however, being below 600 m it " new sentence here, not one more follow on. ✅
 * " 600 m" and "5,000 acre" etc, conversions for consistency.✅
 * Given the doubts, should there be a footnote for wherever the claim that Log an Lagh means "Hollow of the Hill" is considered doubtful? ✅
 * " 25 km2 (9.7 sq mi) 5,000 acre " usually all the conversions are within the parentheses. ✅ – better to stick with the 5,000 acres/ha
 * "the Guinness Estate" this was in bold in the lead, you could repeat that here and note ", for the drinks manufacturer." (for instance)? ✅ – actually found a WP link to the Guinness family, which is probably preferred?
 * Knocknacloghoge redirects to the reference section of this article, looks weird. ✅, fixed to the new "Geography" sub-section
 * "immortalised in The..." the, not The. ✅
 * Song titles normally in quotes. ✅
 * "immortalised in" -> "whose death in a car accident was an inspiration for"? ✅
 * "was a 7,437 square feet, 7-bedroom property, and the Estate had 16,379 square feet" conversions, seven-bedroom, and no need to capitalise Estate. ✅
 * (t)The Beatles is overlinked. ✅
 * "sold 1,600 acres of the" convert. ✅
 * You link RTE (which shouldn't be in italics incidentally) but not Irish Times. ✅
 * "up to his passing in" avoid euphemisms for "death". ✅
 * Where is OSi Discovery 56 referenced? ✅
 * " Wicklow Mountains National Park." is overlinked. ✅
 * "This 7 kilometres" if you're using the convert template, use . ✅ – very handy.
 * Same later. ✅
 * See also has loads of white space, either expand the article or be more judicious with the images. ✅, have expanded lede and added the "Geography" sub-section, which fixes this (just).
 * Date formats in the references should be consistent. ✅
 * DoBIH is overlinked. ✅
 * Bibliography uses surname, forename format for authors, refs use forename surname. Be consistent (I prefer the former). ✅ – used the former.
 * All seven external links useful?? ✅ – down to five, but they useful

Reply

Thank you so much for that. I think I have been able to address most of those points (noted above)? Look forward to hearing from you. Britishfinance (talk) 19:40, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Mostly fine. Could you go through and double-check all references have consistent info, I see a couple of online references which don't have a comprehensive set of parameters, e.g. access dates?  And formats, e.g. "Mountaineering Ireland" is used in italics and not italics.  Ping me when you're done?  The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 11:01, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks . Have fixed the accessdates and checked the refs; also aligned the format for Mountaineering Ireland (as the website owner).  Hope that works. Britishfinance (talk) 11:28, 11 April 2020 (UTC)

Cool, happy with this now so passing. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 12:40, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Britishfinance (talk) 12:42, 11 April 2020 (UTC)