Talk:Luis Alberto Guerrero Reyes/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 23:30, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:30, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the thorough review. I believe I've addressed the points below. Cheers, MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 21:47, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * was killed in a drive-by shooting Link "drive-by shooting".


 * In addition to [...] is used to start a sentence twice in a row in "Early life and career".


 * He became a member of the cartel's newly created paramilitary group known as Los Zetas, Replace "known as" with a comma.


 * and carry out executions on the cartel's behalf. This exact wording appears in the lead and in "Early life and career".


 * and as "Beto", a nickname from his middle name Alberto. Consider "derived from his middle name, Alberto."


 * Guerrero Reyes is often cited as one of the founding members of Los Zetas who was reportedly part of the Grupo de los 14 (English: Group of 14), who were the first fourteen Zetas members. Condense.
 * ✅ I think. I essentially made it two sentences. Lemme know what you think.


 * The course included an art of intimidation class Confusing.
 * I changed it to "intimidation tactics class"


 * following the 14 March arrest of Cárdenas Guillén [...] López Falcón was killed inside a restaurant on 6 May. what year


 * Nothing about the first paragraph of "Shootout and death" implies or states that there was a shootout.
 * The "shootout" would be the drive-by attack. I've removed the word "shootout" from the section's title anyways.


 * Shootout and death: drive-by shooting [...] discotheque [...] Jeep Liberty [...] Ford Mustang Need wikilinks


 * Investigators discovered that Garcia's corpse was holding a grenade in his hand. Officials stated that Garcia was holding the grenade because he intended to use it against his attackers. Condense.


 * The vehicle Guerrero Reyes was in was hit over 100 times with automatic and semi-automatic firearms. Several of the bullets were fired through the windshield. Condense.


 * along with the one driven by the victims. Axe.


 * likely because he intended to use it against his attackers Redundant and maybe WP:OR.
 * , I've removed it. Source reads: "Officials said that Garcia seemed poised to launch a grenade at the attackers".