Talk:Luke Danes

Spoilers
Wondering if this page needs spoiler warnings.

Tone
What "tone" is in dispute, exactly? The fact that it references the character as if he actually exists in reality and not within a fictional context?

I agree. I edited it a bit to look more like an encyclopedic entry but inherent a TV charcter summary requires a non-encyclopedic tone.
 * The problem with the tone comes largely with the fact that much of the information in the article does not belong here. Most of it belongs within the episode summaries. While defining who he is in the series and explaining the significance of his presence in it is important, there really should not be so much detail. It reads more like how I would tell my someone unfamiliar with his character about Luke rather than an encyclopedic entry on a fictional character. Oroneko 08:06, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Some examples of inappropriate tone:
 * "He is a gruff, burly man with a constant five o'clock shadow that never evolves into a full grown beard." (This is a subjective statement, too subjective for contributors to an encyclopedic text. The only way such a line would be acceptable would be if it were a quote from a person who worked on the series (The creator, etc) or a character within the series.)
 * "In season 6 we see that Jess has gotten his act together and written a book. However, Liz recently married a man named T.J. who, despite being dense, really cares for Liz. They have just had a baby girl, Doula." (We should never be used in encyclopedic texts. Also, the last line treats the character Doula like she is a real person and the events like they are currently happening. In general, all entries about t.v. shows should be written in the past tense.)
 * In general the language of this entry is too casual. "After four seasons of on-and-off flirtation, Luke and Lorelai got together."
 * Above all these read like episode summaries. For example, only the facts that April is his daughter, that he did not know about her until much later in life, and that his attempts at establishing a relationship with her interfered in his romantic relationship with Lorelai are truly necessary. Accounts of the incident at April's birthday party, her friends thinking he looks like Hagrid, etc are not appropriate here. They can already be read about in the episode summaries.
 * The article as is is wrought with grammatical errors, mostly consisting of sentences fragments and run on sentences. Ex: "When Sookie told Lorelai that the whole party was Luke's idea, detailing all the work he put into it."


 * Now, honestly the point of all that wasn't to flame you guys. It would be easier to simply cut out all of the inappropriate content than make the effort to explain everything. But, to be frank, if I did that there would be almost nothing left. It is apparent that you all worked very hard on this article and to delete most of it without ceremony would be inconsiderate. So I would like to allow you guys to try and edit this to make the tone more appropriate, if only for experience. Please try to keep these general guidelines, or better yet, look at the many help pages wikipedia has on this exact subject (more specifically the Manual of Style). Be Bold! However, if the article remains this way for too long I will take initiative and cut it down myself.Oroneko 08:37, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Romantic History
The last paragraph is ridiculously long. Can't someone at least break it into seperate paragraphs? 68.34.134.106 10:02, 20 June 2007 (UTC)