Talk:Luke Freeman/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:05, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 20:05, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "He joined Bristol City in 2014 and helped the club to Football League Trophy and League One titles during his first season with the club." - team

Early career

 * "he simultaneously became Gillingham's youngest ever first team player," - Gillingham's youngest first team player in team history
 * "with both teams showing an interest in signing the player." - rewording the text in bold to him will suffice
 * "At the end of the same month," - remove "same"

Arsenal

 * "ensuring Yeovil made a winning start to the season." - victorious
 * "During the 2009–10 campaign, Freeman scored 16 times in 24 games," - wikilink 2009–10 campaign to 2009–10 Premier Academy League
 * "making 15 appearance and scoring twice for the Somerset based club" - Somerset-based

Stevenage

 * "Freeman joined League One club Stevenage on 17 November 2011, on loan until 8 January 2012," - try Freeman joined League One club Stevenage on loan from 17 November 2011 to 8 January 2012,
 * "at Championship side Reading in the FA Cup third round." - link FA Cup third round to 2011–12 FA Cup
 * "as Stevenage lost in the League One play-off semi-finals." - wikilink the text in bold to 2012 Football League play-offs
 * "Premier League side Everton in the League Cup on 28 August 2013," - the emboldened text should be linked to 2013–14 Football League Cup
 * "Freeman also scored in a comfortable 4–0 home win over Stourbridge in the FA Cup" - link FA Cup to 2013–14 FA Cup
 * "secure a 3–2 win away at Bradford City on 1 March 2013." - I think you meant to write 1 March 2014 here
 * "as well as a late winning goal in a 3–2 victory over Walsall, Stevenage's first win in eleven matches" - victory
 * "as Stevenage were relegated to League Two." - wikilink League Two

Bristol City

 * "helping Bristol City secure their fourth straight win." - change the emboldened word to victory to avoid the reptition earlier in the sentence
 * "Freeman received the first red card of his career " - link red card to Fouls and misconduct (association football)
 * "when he was sent-off for a high-footed challenge in a 4–2 home" - a challenge on whom?
 * "draw against Ipswich Town courtesy of a deflected effort." whose deflected effort?

Queens Park Rangers

 * The acronyms of Queens Park Rangers need to be put in brackets

International career

 * "ahead of the 2008 Nordic Tournament, held in Sweden." - link the emboldened text to Nordic Under-17 Football Championship
 * "with England failing to qualify for the Final of the tournament as a result of Norway's superior goal scoring record." - with England failing to qualify for the final due to Norway's superior goal scoring record.
 * "and scored once in England's only victory" - the nation's for the avoidance of reptition
 * "He played in two of England's three games, with England" - the country

Style of play

 * "During his time at Queens Park Rangers," - QPR