Talk:Luminosity – Ignite the Night!/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dom497 (talk · contribs) 00:32, 25 March 2013 (UTC)

Your articles are the only ones that really interest me in the nomination list so I have been left with no choice :P .-- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:32, 25 March 2013 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for 7 days.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:02, 28 March 2013 (UTC)]] On hold until April 8, 2013-- Dom497  ( talk ) 18:24, 1 April 2013 (UTC) Pass!-- Dom497  ( talk ) 21:04, 3 April 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for 7 days.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:02, 28 March 2013 (UTC)]] On hold until April 8, 2013-- Dom497  ( talk ) 18:24, 1 April 2013 (UTC) Pass!-- Dom497  ( talk ) 21:04, 3 April 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold for 7 days.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:02, 28 March 2013 (UTC)]] On hold until April 8, 2013-- Dom497  ( talk ) 18:24, 1 April 2013 (UTC) Pass!-- Dom497  ( talk ) 21:04, 3 April 2013 (UTC)

Comments

 * In the lead, there are three consecutive sentences that start with "it". Change it up a bit! :P -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:47, 25 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:29, 25 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "In 2013, Cedar Point will build the show "in-house", meaning RWS will not coordinate the show.[12] Also in 2013, the show will be performed every night except Tuesday.[13]" - Probably a good idea to combine these two sentences into one. -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:47, 25 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I changed the wording so 2013 wasn't repeated.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:29, 25 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The new show transforms..." - Wasn't Celebration Plaza introduced last year? -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:36, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * --  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:35, 26 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The area features curved edges." - Ummmm, is this really necessary? -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:36, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I'd say so because that was one of the main parts of the project.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:35, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * What?!?! Sorry but how can making curved edges be a main part of the project? Either way it needs a source if it is to stay in the article.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 18:56, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅, they really wanted to create a modern atmosphere as opposed to a lot of the other midways at Cedar Point.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 00:36, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Ummm, a modern atmosphere with curved edges....still makes no sense to me. Oh well, its got a ref so its staying!-- Dom497 ( talk ) 23:50, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "WildCat was fully removed prior to opening day" - Pretty much repeats the same thing as the previous sentence. -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:36, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * --  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:36, 26 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Luminosity performers do flash mobs..." - Do we know if they are doing that this year as well? If not, I think putting this into past tense might be the the best for now. -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:36, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Well not all the details have been released for this season's show so I think we should leave it until we know. I'd think it'll return.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:41, 26 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Luminosity starts at 9:00..." - 9:00 am/pm EST/UST/PST??? -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:36, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Isn't it generally accepted that time formats are what it is located in? I don't think I've ever seen EST/CST/MST/PST in an article.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:41, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * True, I don't know what I was typing, though I still believe am/pm should be included.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 18:56, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 00:36, 27 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "n the middle of the midway, dancers are raised above the crowd. Iron Dragon is closed during the show." - Source? -- Dom497 ( talk ) 00:36, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:51, 26 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Guests are able to send text messages after the show requesting songs from the DJ's playlist" - Source?-- Dom497 ( talk ) 23:57, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Top Thrill Dragster's theme song, Ready to Go by Republica..." - Source? -- Dom497 ( talk ) 23:58, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:42, 28 March 2013 (UTC)

*Ready to Go leads to a disambiguation page. -- Dom497 ( talk ) 23:57, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * --  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:45, 28 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Different props are used in each segment" -- Dom497 ( talk ) 23:57, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:45, 28 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Source for the info about the three segments? -- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:00, 28 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 22:43, 29 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "...the DJ starts to rise from the middle of the stage" really?" - Not quite sure he's in the middle. -- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:00, 28 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Where do you think he is?--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 22:43, 29 March 2013 (UTC)
 * From the angle the video is at, looks like either in front or the front of the stage.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 01:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I reworded it.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 18:44, 1 April 2013 (UTC)


 * "The DJ then starts playing dance music and taking song requests from the crowd. People can also text shout-outs that appear on the screens." - Where does the source state this? -- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:00, 28 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I removed the first part but you can see the shout-outs on the screens in the video.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 18:46, 1 April 2013 (UTC)

*"...balcony of the Coliseum along the main midway" - Source says ballroom, not coliseum.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:00, 28 March 2013 (UTC)
 * The ballroom is in the coliseum.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 22:44, 29 March 2013 (UTC)
 * This is me being picky, but how do we know that?-- Dom497 ( talk ) 01:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I could find a source but I don't think that's really necessary.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 18:41, 1 April 2013 (UTC)
 * But than couldn't some assume that the ballroom is somewhere else?-- Dom497 ( talk ) 21:23, 1 April 2013 (UTC)
 * I added ballroom so there's no confusion.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 21:30, 1 April 2013 (UTC)

*Any reviews from newspapers (or simply not anyone from the industry)?-- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:00, 28 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I looked when I wrote the article and I looked now and couldn't find anything.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 21:32, 1 April 2013 (UTC)

*Refs 9 and 29 are missing publishers. -- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:00, 28 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 22:46, 29 March 2013 (UTC)

Sorry that this is taking so long...got some school stuff to worry about.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 23:57, 27 March 2013 (UTC)
 * That's ok, real life always comes first.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 01:45, 28 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Finally done (though I may do one more thing if I feel like it) !-- Dom497 ( talk ) 20:00, 28 March 2013 (UTC)