Talk:Luo Yixiu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: White whirlwind (talk · contribs) 03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)

You've done a nice job with a dearth of material with which to go on. Here are a few things to correct. First, remove the tone diacritics (marks) from the entire body of the article. You have the pinyin rendering of Luo's name in the opening template, so it won't affect anyone who wishes to pronounce Luo's name correctly but can't read the characters. Second, delete the "Mao's" before "biographers" at the end of the lead. Third, it's unnecessary to give publication dates after the names of researchers or scholars in the article itself - your citations will give those. Fourth, I would unlink and decapitalize South Central China in the lead.

You've done a nice job so far. I would advise you really dig to find a bit more substance to include in the article. After fixing what I've mentioned, adding some more information, and maybe getting another review, I think the article will be ready to pass.  White Whirlwind  咨   03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you White Whirlwind; your comments are appreciated. I have crossed out those points which I have completed so far. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:32, 12 February 2013 (UTC)


 * I completed the removal of the last publication date, removed all the Pinyin diacritics, except the first one, of course, and made some small style changes to the article. I extended MidnightBlue's strikethrough on this page accordingly.  I'll be looking for more information as well.  TI. Gracchus (talk) 15:57, 28 February 2013 (UTC)


 * A follow up: as I mentioned on White Whirlwind's page, I've done more research to see if the page could be fleshed out, and investigated the citation sources as well. I found that this article is now the most definitive, professional, and complete treatment of Luo Yixiu on the internet, including searches on Google Scholar.  Lack of further information can probably be explained by the lack of modern record keeping in rural China and subsequent period of war and upheaval in the mid-twentieth century.  In addition, this article draws from five different biographies, including what is probably, despite its relative lack of documentation, the most authoritative source for information on Mao's early life, "Red Star Over China."  Although I hesitate to say this about anything, I think this article may contain nearly all the information it is possible is to know about Luo Yixiu.  TI. Gracchus (talk) 05:13, 1 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Well, Mightnightblueowl, you proved me totally wrong. I'll help by checking over your additions shortly.  Great work!  — Preceding unsigned comment added by TI. Gracchus (talk • contribs) 21:12, 3 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Hello there! Sorry, I've only just got hold of a copy of Alexander Pantsov and Steven Levine's recently published Mao: The Real Story, which constitutes the most exhaustively researched biography of Mao available; a really magisterial work. It expands quite considerably on information regarding Luo Yigu, and I have combed that particular volume for biographical data to use in this article. I now do agree that this page is as comprehensive as it can realistically be. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:19, 3 March 2013 (UTC)


 * It has been 19 days since the most recent edits of substance were made on the article. What is the status of this review? BlueMoonset (talk) 21:18, 23 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I have no idea what has happened to WhiteWhirlwind, they seem to have vanished (I hope that they are okay, and wish them well if they are facing personal problems that prevent them from editing). It's been over a week since the last post BlueMoonset, so I suggest that we set about looking for a new editor to review this article. I shall put out a request. Midnightblueowl (talk) 23:35, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Given the major changes to the article since the review began, I'm putting this back in the queue. Wizardman 14:55, 5 April 2013 (UTC)