Talk:Lye Church/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 20:11, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠  20:11, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * The word "built" is used over and over again throughout the prose. Mix things up, use some synonyms.
 * Let me know if you think it works better now, I think there's a better flow to the text myself now. Yakikaki (talk) 10:07, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The oldest part of the church is the nave, built in a Romanesque style.[8][9] It was probably built during the last quarter of the 12th century.[10] Put these two together.
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 09:16, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * They were built by a workshop operating on Gotland which has been assigned the notname Egypticus. Move the ILL out of the lead to here.
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 09:16, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * the presently visible roofs put in place in 1968. were put in place.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 09:16, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The building material of Lye Church is mainly grey, tufted limestone. The exterior is whitewashed. Are the walls made of the limestone, and then whitewashed on the outside? Is there a clay coating on the outside unto which the whitewash is applied?
 * The source that details the construction material and that the exterior is whitewashed doesn't mention any clay coating. I've changed the text to "The walls of Lye Church are constructed of mainly grey, tufted limestone, whitewashed on the outside." I think it's as detailed I dare to get, considering the text in the source. Hopefully it's a bit clearer? Yakikaki (talk) 10:13, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Works great now. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:01, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * round arches Remove this wikilink, or just link to arches.
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 09:16, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * nave.the
 * Yakikaki (talk) 09:16, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Immured as part of the southern post is a decorated stone sarcophagus, which may originally have been intended as a grave or a reliquary.[9] It has been roughly adjusted to fit into the church wall.[26] So the sarcophagus is a really large brick? Can you add a picture?
 * Sorry, this was a bit unclear, there is in fact a picture already, it just wasn't clear that it was the same thing as the prose referred to. I hope it's clearer now? I also changed the prose a bit to clarify that it was a stone container probably used as a reliquary and now immured in the church, just as you write, as building material. Yakikaki (talk) 10:21, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The sculptures show several similarities with those at Norrlanda Church and have been described as one of the best examples of the art of the workshop or sculptor known by the notname Egypticus. Replace "one" with "some". It is also well stated by now that Egypticus is not Egypticus's real name, so you can dispense with the "known by the notname" bit.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The paintings were covered with layers of whitewash during the 18th century exposed and renovated during the church renovation in the 1950s. and exposed, and replace "renovated" with "restored".
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Stained glass panes are preserved in the three eastern windows of the chancel, as well as the southern window of the chancel. This can be condensed.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * In total in the church there are 15 window panes with figurative depicitons, [...] Replace "in the church" with a comma.
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * [...] 4 panes with architectural details "4" needs to be spelled out as "four", per MOS:NUMERAL.
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Citations [46] and [48] is repeated redundantly in "Windows"
 * Tried to clean up the section a bit. Yakikaki (talk) 10:31, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Johnny Roosval argued Axe "Johnny" here, he's already been introduced.
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * dates from the middle of the middle of the 13th century.
 * Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The other two items is a 13th-century are.
 * ✅ Yakikaki (talk) 10:02, 4 April 2020 (UTC)