Talk:M-28 Business (Newberry, Michigan)/GA1

GA Review
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Comments: I am placing the article on hold. Dough4872 (talk) 01:37, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) The sentence "M-28 Business Route (BUS M-28) was a state trunkline highway serving as a business route running for 9.0 miles (14.5 km) through the downtown district of Newberry in the US state of Michigan." sounds wordy.
 * 2) "partially turned back to local" sounds awkward.
 * 3) "decommissioned" is a possible neologism. Can another word be used?
 * 4) Remove second link to M-28 in lead.
 * 5) The lead of the article is a little short. Can more information be added?
 * 6) The route description sounds a little dry. Can more descriptive information about the physical surroundings be added?
 * 7) Change "In downtown Newberry, M-28A followed M-48 south and back to M-28." to say "In downtown Newberry, M-28A followed M-48 south, returning to M-28."
 * 8) Can you add a picture of the route as it looks today, a historical picture of the route, or an old map scan to the article?

Replies: Let me know if you have any other suggestions. Imzadi1979 (talk) 05:12, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Reworded.
 * 2) Was missing the word "control" so it should read better now. Please advise if it doesn't.
 * 3) Word swapped, but the word is acceptable per other previous discussions.
 * 4) Done.
 * 5) I played with the wording a bit, to break it into two paragraphs.
 * 6) Since the highway designation hasn't existed in over 50 years, any sources I have access to currently would be about the current physical surroundings, not the ones that existed then.
 * 7) Reworded.
 * 8) I added a scan of the October 1, 1952 map showing the Newberry area and BUS M-28.
 * I will pass the article. Dough4872 (talk) 16:09, 8 July 2009 (UTC)