Talk:M-33 (Michigan highway)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  V C  14:10, 11 March 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I am putting this review on hold for you to address the issues below. I am confident you can get it done within a week.  V  C  16:57, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * My concerns have been addressed. ✅  V C  13:44, 14 March 2011 (UTC)
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I am putting this review on hold for you to address the issues below. I am confident you can get it done within a week.  V  C  16:57, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * My concerns have been addressed. ✅  V C  13:44, 14 March 2011 (UTC)
 * My concerns have been addressed. ✅  V C  13:44, 14 March 2011 (UTC)


 * 1) In the Lead, there are no mention of the routes that are the endpoints. Also, I-75 is not linked at all in the prose.  Both endpoint highways should be included and linked in the first sentence.
 * Added.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 1) There are several instances in the Lead that give general references to things like state forests and concurrencies but no details at all. This may function more to tease than to pique a reader's interest.  Much of the general info seems like filler.  I would add the most important specifics to the lead.  To wit:
 * 2) *Mention the two state forests and one national forest, since the highway passes through those for several tens of miles.
 * 3) **Sorry, I don't agree that they need to be specifically mentioned. That's what the body of the article is for.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 4) *Mention the three highways with which M-33 has concurrencies. Mention a town/village for each concurrency in the sentence or set of sentences to provide context.
 * 5) **Sorry, I don't agree that they need to be specifically mentioned. That's what the body of the article is for.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 6) ***I looked at WP:LEAD for guidance but I was unable to find anything there that sufficiently supports my argument over your argument. Therefore, while I stand by my opinion, we will agree to disagree and I will not hold the article back on this point.  V  C  19:27, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) *Give more specific town endpoints in the history paragraph of the Lead. If you keep the history paragraph condensed into three or four sentences, the History section will not be a rehash of this.
 * 8) **Done.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 9) The Route description does not mention Ogemaw and Oscoda counties.
 * I don't always link or list every county along a highway. I haven't forced a mention of every county in an FA, preferring to let the flow of the prose determine if they need to be mentioned.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * With the sparsity of towns along the route, the counties should be mentioned to provide the reader a more specific general location than "northeastern Lower Peninsula."  V C  19:27, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't agree, but added anyway.  Imzadi 1979  →   03:58, 14 March 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) In the phrase "borders the end of the Au Sable State Forest", I would change "end" to "edge", since the forest boundary is a line rather than a point on a line.
 * Edit applied.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 1) I suggest mentioning Mio Dam Lake and Oscoda County Airport, since the highway passes very close to them. Atlanta Municipal Airport might also be worth a mention.
 * Neither of the first two have an article, so I won't include them since they are not listed on the MDOT map. Atlanta's airport is listed on the map though, and added.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * Mio Pond is listed on the MDOT map, so if that is your criterion, it should be included.  V C  19:27, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Added it, although it was awkward to add the correct location since the pond is really part of the Au Sable River, so I fudged it.  Imzadi 1979  →   03:58, 14 March 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) "The highway continues northward to a 90° turn east near Smith Lake." The phrase 90-degree turn implies a sharp corner, when it fact the curve is rather sweeping.
 * Tweaked mention as part of the next point.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 1) The F- routes should be mentioned in the Route description.
 * Done., however F-18 was left out as too minor to mention.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * F-18 appears on the MDOT map and it appears in the Major intersections. Is there a reason F-18 is too minor to mention in the Route description?
 * I added it, but it's just one of those really minor kinda things. (In many RDs, I skip the CDHs unless there's a reason to mention them, like the rare concurrencies.)  Imzadi 1979  →   03:58, 14 March 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) M-32 is not mentioned at all; perhaps one of the M-68 references is the wrong route?
 * Good catch.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 1) There are what look like two significant settlements not mentioned in the Route description: Canada Creek Ranch, and Tower in Forest Township, Cheboygan County.
 * Where is Canada Creek Ranch? That's not listed on the MDOT map so I won't include it. As for Tower, I can include that, but it's not really significant.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * Canada Creek Ranch is a CDP located on the northern end of Montmorency County. It looks like a private cottage community.  Since it is not on the map, it can be left out.  V  C  19:27, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) "Once in town, M-33 turns west with M-68 to Afton in Cheboygan County. There M-33 turns north one last time, running along the east short of Mullett Lake past Aloha and M-212, the shortest highway in Michigan providing access to Aloha State Park."  The two highways split about 3 miles east of Afton, so I would change "to" to "near".  Also, the clause "the shortest highway in Michigan providing access to Aloha State Park" is problematic.  I would split the second sentence into two sentences or two clauses separated with a semicolon.  The second clause/sentence would describe M-212.
 * Edits applied.  Imzadi 1979  → 
 * 1) The History section mentions Campbell, which may have been a significant place on the maps from decades ago but I cannot find on the map now. To cover the bases, please describe Campbell's general location and the old routing of M-55 so we know where M-33's southern terminus was at the time.
 * Edited.  Imzadi 1979  →