Talk:Madame X Tour/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 24 January 2022 (UTC)

This is one of the qualifying old articles, therefore a review is due easily. --K. Peake 08:36, 24 January 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
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 * Infobox looks good!
 * Add a comma after studio album
 * "It consisted exclusively" → "The tour consisted exclusively"
 * "received some criticism." → "garnered some criticism."
 * Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
 * "its planned final date," → "its planned end date," to be less repetitive with the body
 * "after the French government announced" → "following on from the French government announcing" with the pipe
 * Add another sentence to the second para since three is not enough; maybe a bit more context for the film?

Background and development

 * Remove commas around Madame X, also the source gives a release date of June 14, 2019
 * The AllMusic source alone does not back up the generally positive part, so either find a source that does or remove this
 * "Previous to the album's" → "Prior to the album's"
 * Write 2019 Billboard Music Awards, as elsewise it could have been one in another year for all readers know
 * Wikilink Page Six per MOS:LINK2SECT, also the term "in" should be used instead of "on" for a month
 * Mention here that the BBC News interview was in 2017 because you have wrote that year in the lead
 * "on May 6 through" → "on May 6, 2019, through"
 * "the Madame X Tour began and ended" → "the Madame X Tour began and ended, respectively." on the img text, to be clearer
 * Remove the mixed part since the source does not state that; instead, start the sentence with "Some fans complained of"
 * "included forty-one musicians," → "included 41 musicians," per MOS:NUM
 * "12 dancers and 14 of" → "12 dancers, and 14 of"
 * "staircases and other reconfigurable" → "staircases, and other reconfigurable"
 * "Wardrobe included a" → "The wardrobe included a"
 * "with feathered tricorne hat and a chiffon dress" → "with a feathered tricorne hat and a chiffon dress, with"
 * The source does not specify that the eyepatches are what was inspired by Paris 1902 nor does it say they are Madonna's trademark
 * Source does mention this: One image has as caption: As part of the stunning designs for Madonna's Madame X tour, Elizabeth Emanuel and her team spent many hours on the signature look - including the famous eye-patches, inspired by her Paris 1902 collection

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 * "Miu Miu and" → "Miu Miu, and"
 * Wikilink black and white
 * The source for the ending part of the tour only mentions that cancellation was forced, not what venue she last performed at
 * Mention that it was "signed vinyls" available like you have do for the previous content that was framed and signed, per the source
 * "hoodies and tees." → "hoodies, and tees."
 * "photo booth and a" → "photo booth, and a"

Concert synopsis
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 * It is not sourced anywhere that she performed "Like A Prayer" for an encore, so maybe mention the staircase instead on img text?
 * Regarding MOS:TVPLOT, are you sure having James Baldwin's quote with no source is not too much detail?
 * I think it would be more appropriate to write the shows began if this is a generalization and elsewise, mention which show you are summarizing here
 * "disturb the peace"." → "disturb the peace."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * "as if he's been shot." → "as if he had been shot."
 * Merge the "God's Control" sentence with the number one per them being too short for standing alone
 * Add the release year of The Nutcracker since this is a film, so the year can be included unlike the songs where it would be too much
 * "it counted with a" → "it featured a"
 * "are projected across" → "were projected across"
 * "Estere and Mercy James" → "Estere, and Mercy James"
 * Remove full stop after "I'm not your bitch!" since the closing punctuation is inside the quote
 * Pipe "Vogue" to Vogue (Madonna song)
 * "shades and high heels." → "shades, and high heels."
 * "had 14 of the 22 women of" → "had 14 women of" because you introduced the orchestra as having 22 members previously
 * ""Fado Pechincha" and" → ""Fado Pechincha", and" per and being used again very shortly after this
 * "this last one was" → "the last one was"
 * The final speech mark is missing after Sodade
 * "of the video of her daughter Lourdes." → "of the video of Leon." since she is the only person mentioned in this article with the surname
 * "staircase surrounded by" → "staircase while surrounded by"
 * Wikilink music video

Critical
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 * "received positive reviews from critics;" → "was met with generally positive reviews from critics." since this should not be in a review's sentence
 * "Rob Sheffield deemed it" → "Rob Sheffield deemed the tour" with the wikilink
 * "concluding that it "proves Madonna" → "concluding that it proves "Madonna" per the real quote/grammar
 * Any full sentences quoted from the sources should have the punctuation inside speech marks per MOS:QUOTE
 * "album and show, "Madame X" is" → "album and show, 'Madame X' is" because you can't use the same speech marks inside quotes
 * ""at times, performance" → ""at times[,] performance" per the inserted comma
 * "and naming it "one of" → "and "one of" to be less wordy
 * "writing for Paper, opined it was" → "for Paper, opined the tour was"
 * Remove duplicate usage of the word example
 * You should only use single speech marks for the mentions of Madame X in the quotebox per my earlier comment
 * "from the BBC News gave" → "from BBC News gave"
 * "Writing for Las Vegas Weekly, Josh Bell" → "For Las Vegas Weekly, Josh Bell"
 * "also praised: Josh Bell highlighted" → "also praised; Bell highlighted"
 * Remove the pipes on the songs mentioned in the above sentence
 * Remove pipe on "Frozen"
 * Remove pipes on "I Rise" and "Express Yourself"
 * "Bradley Stern felt the singer had recreated performances from the past:" → "Stern felt the singer had recreated past performances;"
 * Remove pipe on "Dark Ballet"
 * Remove pipe on 2019 Billboard Awards and italicise Billboard
 * Remove pipe on "Batuka"
 * Like before, separate the summary sentence at the beginning from the first review
 * "Ilana Kaplan said it was" → "Kaplan said it was"
 * Remove wikilink on "Papa Don't Preach"
 * "and presented in" → "and it is presented in" per the source's quote
 * "Rhian Daly opined that" → "Daly opined that"
 * Remove the comma directly after Chicago-Sun Times
 * ""the show is hardly" → ""The show is hardly" per this being a full sentence quoted
 * "expressed that "for Madonna" → "expressed, "For Madonna"
 * "Victor Fiorillo wrote that" → "Fiorillo wrote that"
 * "Fiorillo felt the show" → "He felt the show"
 * "to shrink an arena show" → "to shrink a stadium show" and put more of this review into your own words per WP:QUOTEFARM
 * Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) and are there not any more accolades for the show?

Commercial
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 * Shouldn't you write $60 to $760 for consistency?
 * "On October, Billboard reported that the first sixteen dates" → "In October 2019, Billboard reported that the first 16 dates" per MOS:NUM

Tardiness controversy and cancellations
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 * Retitle to Controversy and cancellations, as readers can wait until the section to see what the controversy was
 * Add a full-stop at the end of the last sentence on the img text
 * "is never late". → "is never late." per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * "at around 1:00 a.m.", the suit" → "at around 1:00 a.m", the lawsuit"
 * "for the February 5 concert" → "for the February 5, 2020 concert"
 * The last North American concert should be first per chronological order, plus can you mention where this concert was specifically?
 * "to all my fans"." → "to all my fans."" per my earlier comment

Documentary
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 * Pipe documentary to Documentary film
 * "On July 15," → "On July 15, 2021"
 * "South America, Australia and the" → "Latin America, Australia, and the" since that is what the source says and is not from the South
 * "Sasha Kasiuha and" → "Sasha Kasiuha, and"
 * "Alexis Petridis deemed it" → "Alexis Petridis deemed the film" with the wikilink
 * "opined it was" → "opined the documentary is"

Set list
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 * Remove excess space for 16.
 * "on February 6, Madonna" → "on February 6, 2020, Madonna"
 * Simon and Garfunkel → Simon & Garfunkel

Shows

 * Good

Personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; the sources have quite a few unreliable ones that I covered. --K. Peake 18:38, 24 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I have covered all the points !, let me know if I have missed anything --Christian (talk) 02:40, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Nice work in starting on this so fast, but you have missed the fix of the October part in the commercial sub-section and not added anything to The New York Times ref that represents limited access. --K. Peake 08:25, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I think I might have missed the part regarding limited access what do you mean by that? --Christian (talk) 14:48, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * When clicking on The New York Times articles, you are subject to a limit unless a subscriber. --K. Peake 16:16, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Christian (talk) 19:04, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, but I added a space before the ref's subscription template for you. --K. Peake 21:23, 25 January 2022 (UTC)