Talk:Madison Bumgarner/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Go Phightins! (talk · contribs) 01:17, 29 March 2014 (UTC)

Hello again,. It's always a pleasure to review your articles, so I will be more than happy to look at this one.  Go  Phightins  !  01:17, 29 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Miscellaneous comments
 * Lead
 * As much as I hate it, I think we are supposed to include metric conversions for that sort of stuff too :-(
 * No mention of early life in lead ... make sure to incorporate a "little of everything"
 * Career
 * If possible, seek to include a little bit about his upbringing/family etc. Generally, for current players, there are some features out there about him ... check hometown paper.
 * ... Do we have anything to which we can link 4A State Champinonship, or can we include a note or something ... not everyone is familiar with high school championship structure in the U.S. It's weird, and varies state-to-state.
 * I am ambivalent on this sentence's inclusion. It's interesting ... for a while; maybe just keep it to mentioning Cain and maybe Lowry, as that is somewhat relevant to Bumgarner. Open to discussion on this, though.
 * Do we have any anecdotal/qualitative/development-oriented information on his time in the minor leagues? Regurgitation of statistics gets old and unengaging pretty quickly.
 * What accounted for the drop in prospect ranking?
 * I don't feel like diagramming the sentence to see if it is a run-on, but run-on or not, it is rather cumbersome. Can it be split somehow?
 * Can one "accrue" an average? Meh.
 * Why did his velocity drop? Injury? We need more context.
 * The second paragraph of the 2010 section is nice.
 * The "Caining" thing seems trivial to me ... if it were about Bumgarner, maybe, but it's not.
 * Spell out and/or explain WHIP at its first mention ("2013 saw Bumgarner set career bests for ERA (2.77), WHIP (1.03) and strikeouts (199) in 31 starts, finishing with a 13–9 record.")

All right, unfortunately, at this point, this article is not going to satisfy criteria 1(a), possibly not 1(b), nor 3(a) ... the pitching style section can definitely be expanded to encompass more than just what he throws, you can focus on his approach, his delivery, etc. The velocity decline thing is an opportune time to elucidate on more than just on-field performance. The tragedy with his sister is also prime opportunity for expansion into his life off-the-field. This article falls into the trap that many sports articles do; it focuses almost entirely on what happens on the field. I am a stats geek, and I, quite frankly, am a little bored. Regrettably, I am going to have to fail this article, as it does not meet the GA criteria at this time. It is solidly a B-Class article, but right now, it does not satisfy the GA criteria. Sorry.  Go  Phightins  !  02:04, 29 March 2014 (UTC)