Talk:Magnificat (Torri)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Juliette Han (talk · contribs) 16:23, 7 June 2020 (UTC)

Soon. Juliette Han (talk) 16:23, 7 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Tx. Looking forward to the review. --Francis Schonken (talk) 04:38, 14 June 2020 (UTC)
 * ...It appears the reviewer who reserved this review has been blocked indefinitely; in their place, I can review the article if you'd like. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  12:30, 16 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I'd be very glad if you took it over, see also User talk:Juliette Han. --Francis Schonken (talk) 12:37, 16 June 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
Hello, and come what may from this review, thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. During the review, I may make copyedits, which I will limit to spelling correction and minor changes to punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. The Nominator(s) should understand that I am a grammar pedant, and I will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. For responding to my comments, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:13, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * What do you think about adding a short explanation of who Pietro Torri was? Specifically, how he came to work for the Bavarian Elector and whatever became of him and his works.
 * Re. "how he came to work for the Bavarian Elector" – afaik that is not known. → ❌ --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Re. "whatever became of him" – afaik same employers, and same line of work, although rather dramatic works than Latin church music, until the end of his life: could add some words about that, I suppose in the "History" section. → --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC) → ✅ --Francis Schonken (talk) 18:40, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Re. "... and his works" – would be something like "largely forgotten for the next few centuries", which to my taste is maybe too much of a platitude for article prose. → ❌ --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * [...] single continuo part for unspecified instrument(s) [..] Delete the parentheses here ("unspecified instruments").
 * ✅ --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * [...] as tenth and last movement) The tenth and last movement.
 * ✅ --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * [...] Bach P 195: Replace the colon with a semi-colon.
 * ✅ --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

Referencing
References are reliable, and cover the whole article. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:33, 24 June 2020 (UTC)


 * Citation [11] would do a better job supporting the bullet-points its attached to if it were to proceed them at the colon.
 * ✅ --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:31, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * There isn't a citation for the bullet-point list in "Ninth movement"; I'm assuming it's being held up by [1] and [3].
 * ✅ (yes, these two refs were for the entire section, clearer now). --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:31, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

GA progress
Article passes CopyVio scanner. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:33, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

Images used on the article are relevant and free use or tagged. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:33, 24 June 2020 (UTC)