Talk:Mako Idemitsu

Own words
The line "Idemitsu grew up in a very old fashioned, male-dominant, typical patriarchal family." appears both here and at here however I don't detect so much that this article is copying the brooklynmuseum.org material, as it is that both are lifting phrasing from the same source.--KTo288 (talk) 23:02, 12 November 2014 (UTC)
 * Source of material for both is the official website, biography section here is copied from material listed under the "artist' option. Nominating for speedy as a copyvio,--KTo288 (talk) 23:09, 12 November 2014 (UTC)

==Comments== I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've done a nice job on this article. It's well-organized, well-written, and content is cited. You've provided background and career information.

The only real issue that I see is that the biography from the subject's website is used as a citation in several places. It is not considered a reliable source because it is a primary source of a living person. If you could find another source, that would be good. One option is this site, which also has an image that you may want to use as a fair use image.

It would be nice to see the list of collections sorted in some fashion, alphabetically, etc. That's not a big deal, though.

I'll check in on you again, and I'll be watching this page if you have any questions or comments.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 05:18, 1 November 2014 (UTC)


 * Adding comments from sandbox talk page, which will help explain why the article was tagged for deletion.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 23:35, 12 November 2014 (UTC)

== Speedy deletion nomination ==

The article was tagged for speedy deletion by due to a copyright violation - which is definitely a Criteria for speedy deletion of an article.


 * I am not finding a copyright violation for the link that was given in the CSD template, but I will check the article more closely.


 * In general, it is not wise to use an artist's website as a source of content for an article, which I think may be part of the issue. There may be lists or other info on the artist's website that would show up in the duplication detector report, so I will check for that.
 * This is an article for an educational program, which is monitored by 2 online ambassadors and an instructor.

As I say, I will check for copyright violations... and see that the article has been retagged. Worst case scenario, the article needs to be fixed in the sandbox and then returned to article space.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 23:42, 12 November 2014 (UTC)

=== re Mako Idemitsu === Moved from User talk:CaroleHenson: Go to http://www.makoidemitsu.com/www/home.html, see the boxes at the top, click on the one marked artist. compare text there with the biography section. Do not just remove speedy templates, if you must contest it click on the contest button and argue your case at a DR.--KTo288 (talk) 23:41, 12 November 2014 (UTC)
 * Do not trust the bot, use your own eyes, again you do not contest speedies by removing templates, will take this to 3RR, remove the template again and I will ask for Administrator intervention.--KTo288 (talk) 23:51, 12 November 2014 (UTC)


 * Of course, if you'd give me a minute. I am guessing you didn't read the talk page posting I made above about the next steps. I am very thorough.
 * Of course, if you'd give me a minute. I am guessing you didn't read the talk page posting I made above about the next steps. I am very thorough.


 * In the short run I've removed all content cited to the artist's site and will first work to verify if what remains is a copyvio of anything there. And take it from there.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 23:56, 12 November 2014 (UTC)
 * And how do you address the fact that you are trying to circumvent speedy deletion by removing the template? If you were so sure that it was not a copyvio why not argue your case at an AfD.--KTo288 (talk) 00:01, 13 November 2014 (UTC)

[edit conflict] Seriously, that's your point when someone has said directly - the first thing in the post - that copyvio is absolutely a reason for speedy deletion - but I'm trying to work it????


 * I am first going to try and verify the remaining source to ensure there's no copyvio issue there. I promise, I will not drop this.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 00:03, 13 November 2014 (UTC)
 * No what you said was that copyvio was a reason for deletion, but that you didn't believe that this was a case of a copy violation. Let me ask you two straight questions, and I only need yes and no answers, i)have you now looked personally at the sources. ii)Do you believe that the article was a copyvio.--KTo288 (talk) 00:14, 13 November 2014 (UTC)
 * No what you said was that copyvio was a reason for deletion, but that you didn't believe that this was a case of a copy violation. Let me ask you two straight questions, and I only need yes and no answers, i)have you now looked personally at the sources. ii)Do you believe that the article was a copyvio.--KTo288 (talk) 00:14, 13 November 2014 (UTC)

Next steps
The content of this article has been removed because it is a copyright violation - some of it from the artist's website and some from this site. As stated, content cannot be directly copied from a source into this article. And, attributing it to another source does not solve the issue. Both the CLARA site and the artist's website are copyright protected. Copied text is a copyright violation, which is a serious legal concern.

Please see the related close paraphrasing article about how to ensure that when you're paraphrasing the content is not similar enough to be a copyright violation.

Right now, it's fine to leave this page as a stub. I recommend making changes in the sandbox - rewriting content in your own words - and I can take a look at them to ensure that there are no violations before it's moved back to article space.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 00:22, 13 November 2014 (UTC)


 * In the short run, I removed it as an "article" on the course page, until the article in your sandbox is rewritten to resolve these issues. You've got a great subject and with some additional work, I think it's going to be a great article!-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 00:49, 13 November 2014 (UTC)


 * , You may want to copy over some of the additions made by to your sandbox page. Otherwise, your content can be integrated with KTo288's when you've completed your draft of the article.-- CaroleHenson   ( talk ) 18:34, 13 November 2014 (UTC)

Orphan tag
The article was tagged as an "orphan" which means there aren't many articles that link to this article. See WhatLinksHere. You could also add cited content and a link in her father's article: Sazō Idemitsu - and articles relevant to experimental film and video or other articles relevant to her career. Links from other articles helps increase the number of times the article will be seen and read.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 22:52, 13 November 2014 (UTC)

Writing with clarity
I found your article very interesting and a thorough representation of Make Idemitsu's life. You were also able to bring in a lot of the topics that we learned in class. Most of my edits were simply shortening sentences or replacing pronouns with proper nouns to make the whole thing clearer. I did find one issue that I was uncertain if it needed fixing or how to fix it. Under Work in the section titled 'influences of technology' it said that she switched to video. I am unclear whether that meant switching from Super 8 film or simply when she began working with film If she did switch from another form be sure to explain the differences. Other than that, I found your words to be clear and concise. Esunnucks (talk) 20:42, 25 November 2014 (UTC)