Talk:Mallory Hagan/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cirt (talk · contribs) 20:45, 16 April 2013 (UTC)

I will review this article. &mdash; Cirt (talk) 20:45, 16 April 2013 (UTC)

Good article nomination on hold
This article's Good Article promotion has been put on hold. During review, some issues were discovered that can be resolved without a major re-write. This is how the article, as of April 21, 2013, compares against the six good article criteria:


 * 1. Well written?: Writing is pretty good, I'd recommend a few things:
 * Put in a request at WP:GOCE for a copyedit, and also put in polite requests to talk pages of relevant WikiProjects for copyeditors.
 * Copyedit requests completed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:47, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Split the Background sect into two subsections with Background as the parent sect for that, maybe something like Early life, and then something else.
 * Split.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:59, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * 2013 Miss America pageant - "During the Good Morning America weatherman Sam Champion delivered her question..." this doesn't read quite right.
 * Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:02, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * 2. Factually accurate?: Duly cited throughout.
 * 3. Broad in coverage?: Feels like it's missing a bit of secondary source commentary or Reception or Perception or comments from the judges or something like that.
 * The current commentary seems to be mostly about her weight gain.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:34, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * I see, ugh, nevermind then, no need to include that drivel. &mdash; Cirt (talk) 17:40, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Is there a BLP issue here. I see the same issue is no longer included at Jennifer Love Hewitt.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:18, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Yes, most likely, it's also pretty trivial info. &mdash; Cirt (talk) 23:47, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * 4. Neutral point of view?: Neutral presentation throughout, seems okay with this respect.
 * 5. Article stability? Article edit history and talk page history stable.
 * 6. Images?: No images used.

Please address these matters soon and then leave a note here showing how they have been resolved. After 48 hours the article should be reviewed again. If these issues are not addressed within 7 days, the article may be failed without further notice. Thank you for your work so far. &mdash; Cirt (talk) 16:23, 21 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Question about that awkward sentence
 * "During the Good Morning America weatherman Sam Champion asked her the following question..." &mdash; still seems awkward, did you mean maybe to remove that superfluous first "the" ? &mdash; Cirt (talk) 17:07, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:35, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * You're welcome! Thanks for being so responsive to my above recommendations. :) I'll perform another evaluation soon, and update back here. &mdash; Cirt (talk) 21:36, 21 April 2013 (UTC)

Passed as GA quality
Good job, thanks for the responsiveness to the above GA Review recommendations, &mdash; Cirt (talk) 02:12, 23 April 2013 (UTC)