Talk:Mam Sonando/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 07:10, 27 May 2013 (UTC)


 * I'll take this. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:10, 27 May 2013 (UTC)

Comments

 * (born c. 1941 ) - Perhaps note that the article states he was so old at a certain time.
 * Added efn to add this detail.
 * for school. - What school?
 * "When he returned to Cambodia in 1993 after spending the better part of 30 years in Paris - first for schooling in 1964 and then to flee the political chaos that engulfed the country when the Khmer Rouge took power in 1975 -" -- best I've found so far
 * Fact tags for direct quotations
 * These are covered by the following citations, but added more immediate inline
 * Thanks. Just to point out, the GA criteria call for citations for direct quotations. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:37, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Labeling issues: Early life spanning the good part of sixty years? Need a different section header. Might be worth merging with below section, as half of the Early life section is about Beehive Radio.
 * Yeah, it's tough with somebody like Sonando. You just want to write "pre-international fame life" but that's not really a legitimate header. But I went ahead and merged the first two sections--I agree with you that that helps.
 * which broadcasts on 105 FM. - Worth including a year here?
 * Thought about it and just removed the frequency as irrelevant detail. It's at the Beehive radio article if somebody needs it anyway.
 * a new series of clashes between Sonando and Hun Sen. - They certainly weren't fighting, so another word may be needed
 * How about "disputes"?
 * a protest against evictions for a new rubber plant, which residents accused of "land-grabbing". - Could be misread as the protest being accused of land grabbing
 * tweaked. I should have been using "that" here anyway.
 * half a square meter to sleep in - might need a convert template here
 * How does that work when it's inside a quotation? I agree it'd be helpful, I just have no idea how to format it.
 * I think an addition in square brackets (indicating editorial comments) would be acceptable. Use the convert template, preview so you see the actual numbers, and copy/paste the actual imperial measurement into the article. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:37, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:50, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * What's the relation between the Royal Palace and Prime Minister?
 * Just that they're both part of the govt; the source doesn't really specify why the royal palace is the target here. (Perhaps the king has power of pardon).
 * If it's anything like Thailand, probably a lot more than that. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:37, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * 2013 Human Rights Defender at Risk award - is it notable?
 * The organization is notable, the award is eh. To put it another way, I wouldn't add it to Aung San Suu Kyi's article, but for such an already sparse article, it seemed worth adding as a measure of the international attention he's getting. The nomination did get a story in the VOA, for what that's worth.
 * "devout Buddhist" - why the scare quotes?
 * Just regular quotes. Removed.
 * Image needs a caption in the infobox
 * Done. The image is uncaptioned at VOA, leaving it potentially unclear what court appearance this photograph was taken at, so I'm making the caption generic.
 * File:Mam Sonando.jpg: Copyright looks fine, but wouldn't a crop work better?
 * I'm possibly being influenced by my natural laziness here, but I actually like having the police/guards in the photo to make the context clear. Since he's mostly notable for his arrests, it seems appropriate.
 * Are you absolutely certain there is nothing more on his personal life or history before returning to Cambodia?
 * I'm pretty certain that there's nothing more in English, though I do wonder what more I could find if I spoke Khmer. I am confident that his pre-Cambodia life isn't a "main aspect" per the (English) sources, though; after searches of Google Books, Scholar, and News as well as Highbeam, the Asia Times source is the only one I saw that discusses his pre-journalism biography in any detail. Almost all the information from that is now in the article. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:27, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Well, I can't help you with Khmer . For GA I think this would be okay, but for anything higher you'd need to consult Khmer sources. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:37, 27 May 2013 (UTC)

Otherwise looks quite solid. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:29, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks, really appreciate your taking a look! Just let me know if you see anything else or would like more work on any of the above. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:27, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Alright, just the one issue left. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:37, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Got it, I think. -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:50, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Looks good, passing as a GA. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:39, 28 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review and suggestions! -- Khazar2 (talk) 11:24, 28 May 2013 (UTC)