Talk:Mama's Sleeping Scarf/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 15:19, 3 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 20:56, 7 May 2024 (UTC)

Happy to discuss, or be challenged on, any of my review comments. I note that there were some edits on 8 April that, despite their size, don't appear to have resulted in major overall changes. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:58, 7 May 2024 (UTC)
 * I made a couple of changes suggested by scripts. Hopefully these are not objectionable. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:49, 7 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @BennyOnTheLoose, thank you for your swift review. I’ll implement them shortly. Best, Reading Beans  13:48, 8 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @BennyOnTheLoose, can you check now? Is there something I am missing? Best, Reading Beans  10:17, 11 May 2024 (UTC)
 * The only thing I can immediately see is that in "Congolese-Angolan" the links are to disambiguation pages. This can either be delinked, or re-linked to suitable targets. I'll check the rest shortly. Thanks. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:13, 11 May 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for your work on the article. I'm satisfied that it meets the GA criteria, so I'm passing it. I see you mentioned you're still working on the lead but IMO it's now fine for a GA. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:52, 12 May 2024 (UTC)

Plot
 * The plot summary seems rather short. I haven't read the book, but it looks from the reviews like some detail could be added.
 * "spends the day wit her" - typo (with)

Writing and publication
 * Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie writing as Nwa Grace-James wanted to write a children book but was hesitant and was worried that "she would have somebody die" as she thought that her creativity was "too dark" - I'd suggest exapnding on this slightly, and breaking it into at least two sentences. Maybe first the hesitancy and the reasons, which the Publisher's Weekly source covers; then a sentence about the pen name (which The Washington Post is a good source for). As an example, you could include the info about the pseudonym here rather than just in a footnote to the lead.
 * ✅. Check the edits I've made.
 * "write a children book" - "write a children's book"
 * "resumed writing after the death of her father" - maybe "resumed writing after the death of her own father", to avoid possible confusion?
 * Spot check on The first two draft of the book was canceled by Adichie because it bored her daughter who the main character—Chino—was based on - no issues
 * "The first two draft of the book was canceled" - "The first two drafts of the book were canceled"
 * Spot check on According to Adichie, several illustration samples was sent to her but that of Avelino was what she thought captured African life. - no issues
 * "several illustration samples was sent to her but that of Avelino was what she thought captured African life." - maybe soemthing like "several artists' illustration samples were sent to her. She felt that Avelino captured African life." Optionally, maybe add a bit more about her reaction to Avelino's work.
 * ✅. I'll see if I can her reaction.
 * The lead has "Congolese-Angolan illustrator Joelle Avelino" - maybe include all od that that in the body, with sources.
 * "The book was published on 5 September 2023 as the first publication in a three-book deal" - maybe something like "The book was published on 5 September 2023 as the first part of a three-book deal" to avoid the closeness of published/publication
 * Any reason not to include the info about the Penguin Random House editions before the info about the Spanish edition, rather than after?
 * The lead has "Congolese-Angolan illustrator Joelle Avelino" - maybe include all od that that in the body, with sources.
 * "The book was published on 5 September 2023 as the first publication in a three-book deal" - maybe something like "The book was published on 5 September 2023 as the first part of a three-book deal" to avoid the closeness of published/publication
 * Any reason not to include the info about the Penguin Random House editions before the info about the Spanish edition, rather than after?
 * Any reason not to include the info about the Penguin Random House editions before the info about the Spanish edition, rather than after?
 * Any reason not to include the info about the Penguin Random House editions before the info about the Spanish edition, rather than after?

Reception
 * Spot check on Kirkus Reviews praised the "bright, fantastical backgrounds with repeating circular patterns" while noting that the book "is a cozy read-aloud to help little ones wind down before a nap or bed." - no issues.
 * While Publishers Weekly called a "straightforward yet lively telling". - incomplete sentence
 * Spot check on While Publishers Weekly called a "straightforward yet lively telling" - no issues.
 * Spot check on In a mixed review, Chinelo Eze of The Guardian reviewed "[i]t would have been nice to see more adventure and substance in some of the scenes" before concluding it is "a treasure for mothers looking for the perfect bonding moments with their daughters, and it is a tale that is not so unfamiliar for a child." - no issues.
 * Optionally, summarise or describe the reviews rather than just using direct quotes.
 * ❌, I use quotes to avoid copyright issues
 * Spot check on The Guardian's "Best New Picture Books and Novels" - probably should add that it was a list of children's (or children's and teens) books.
 * Spot check on and The Independent's "5 New Books To Read This Week" where it received a 7/10 rating - although Prudence Wade is names at the top of the article, this review is by Yolanthe Fawehinmi. Listing and rating are as per the source.
 * Consider adding something from The Independent review (preferably not another direct quote) to the reviewer comments.
 * Is this necessary and compulsory?
 * No, I just thought as ther are relatively few reviews it might be worth adding something, but if you think it won't add value then no need. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:36, 10 May 2024 (UTC)

Lead
 * Rather short, even for a short article. How about adding in some material from the Writing and publication section; and maybe summarising some of the review comments?
 * "It tells the story of a child who gets pacified using the scarf of mother" - "It tells the story of a child who gets pacified using the scarf of her mother"
 * "It tells the story of a child who gets pacified using the scarf of mother" - "It tells the story of a child who gets pacified using the scarf of her mother"