Talk:Manta (SeaWorld Orlando)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:14, 30 June 2013 (UTC)

Comments this is far too close to being an advert for the ride for me.
 * Page title needs to be in italics.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:12, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Image caption "Manta water effect" what does that mean, "effect'?
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * "on a soaring, gliding journey" reads like an advert.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Lead is a little short. We have WP:LEAD to help give advice here.
 * I've extended it a bit. Is this sufficient? Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Need to be careful, you've taken a lot of direct quotes, is it all really necessary?
 * I've reduced the quotes down to a single phrase. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * In the infobox you have "3,359" but "1500". Be consistent throughout with the commas.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:12, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * "is intended to be much more than a roller coaster" advert.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * "The experience begins" advert.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * "allow guests to observe the animals" advert.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * "Manta's rails, supports, and track are filled with sand to reduce noise and to fit the theme of a manta ray gliding silently through the water" advert (and inconsistent use of italics).
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Image captions that aren't complete sentences should not have full stops.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:12, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Throughout, when referring to the ride, it should be Mantra not Mantra.
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:12, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * "Mitch Hawker's Best Roller Coaster Poll (Steel)" is referenced to an award about "Steel Roller Coaster Poll" and I'm not even sure about the reliability of that website.
 * I've tweaked the title of the poll. As to the reliability, it has been cited by many reliable sources including the LA Times and Washington Times-Herald . Park operators such as Six Flags have also cited the rankings . Even though I know "other stuff exists" shouldn't really be used as a reason, two featured articles (SheiKra and Millennium Force) as well as many of the GA-Class roller coaster articles also display the results of this poll.  Themeparkgc   Talk  23:12, 30 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Please use en-dashes, not hyphens, in website titles (per WP:DASH).
 * Fixed. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:12, 30 June 2013 (UTC)

GAN criteria
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * Could use a better lead and read less like an advert.
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * As noted above, several MOS issues.
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * As above, concerns over the fact that some of it reads like the brochure, or maybe an adaptation of the website.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

On hold, pending those issues noted above. The most troubling are the neutral tone/borderline advert issues. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:26, 30 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Firstly, thanks for the review. Secondly, I believe I have resolved your concerns. If there are any other advert concerns, please highlight them so that I can address them. Themeparkgc   Talk  23:45, 30 June 2013 (UTC)
 * You're welcome, all good for me. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:22, 2 July 2013 (UTC)