Talk:Maps (Billy Woods and Kenny Segal album)/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 13:58, 2 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Joeyquism (talk · contribs) 21:02, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

Hi ! So awesome to see Billy Woods and Kenny Segal at GAN - I loooooove Hiding Places ("Crawlspace" is my favorite track - that Anatolian rock sample is just too hard). I'll try to get this review done within the week. If you have any questions, let me know! --Joeyquism (talk) 21:02, 4 June 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you for taking on the review! Looking forward to your feedback :) ModernDayTrilobite (talk • contribs) 22:48, 4 June 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the detailed review! I've gone through your points and they make sense to me. Some specific notes I wanted to raise about the revisions I've made:
 * I contextualized "Feeling Good" as a pop standard, but decided to omit the year as I felt the sentence flowed better without it.
 * In addition to adding the wikilinks you suggested, I wikilinked gentrification in the Content section, and piped "synth keyboard" to synthesizer and "pop standard" to standard (music). To that end, I wanted to flag the phrase pop standard "Feeling Good" for your thoughts; in my opinion, this is the most natural way to write the sentence, but the two wikilinks are separated by just a quotation mark so it's potentially verging on SEAOFBLUE. My personal instinct is that it works, but I'm interested to hear your thoughts as well.
 * About the point you raised in 2c: the passages I had in mind when I wrote that clause were Instead of emphasizing immersion in distant places and sounds like [other albums], Maps foregrounds transit (from source 1) and here is a protagonist who is perpetually on planes, in Ubers, or alone in hotels (from source 11). I tried rephrasing the relevant line in the article to involve less extrapolation; let me know if the new phrasing addresses your concerns, or if you'd like me to revise further.
 * About the blockquotes: I'm reluctant to completely excise either blockquote, as I think they break up the section visually to avoid a "wall of text" feel, but I've used ellipses to cut out some of the more ancillary portions of each quote and reduce the similarity. As of my latest check, the Rolling Stone source is now showing 28.6% similarity, and Huck is now showing 32.0%. Let me know if this addresses your concerns, or if you'd like me to prune further.
 * I believe I've fully incorporated all of the suggestions that I didn't discuss in the bullet points above, but please feel free to let me know if I've missed anything. ModernDayTrilobite (talk • contribs) 15:24, 6 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @ModernDayTrilobite Thank you for the update!
 * I think wikilinking "pop standard" is fine, but you can also get the same information by clicking "Feeling Good". Either way, it's a bit of a minute point and I'm sure it's not that big a deal.
 * I am seeing the quotes you mentioned regarding 2c - that's my fault for not being so thorough. Thank you for the clarification.
 * Blockquotes are looking much better. No further pruning needing IMO.
 * After reading through the article a couple more times, I think everything is looking in good shape! Well done! Joeyquism (talk) 19:42, 6 June 2024 (UTC)